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Mighty Warrior Spirit

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He comes on the breath of the wind.

A whisper through the trees.

The mighty Warrior Spirit filling the valley below.

Bringing victory to the tribe that dwells upon the Hill.

For many moons his mighty Spirit has reigned and walked these halls.

And showered strength on all who entered through these doors, to learn, to play and to show who is the mightiest Warrior of all.

 

He comes on the breath of the wind.

A whisper through the trees.

The mighty Warrior Spirit protecting the Hill and the valley that lies below.

Author notes

we are all under the protection of Spirit , always

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  • Winged Unicorn
    March 30
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    WOW

    I truly like this piece, it symbolises so much. I do think the spacing of the poem could be improved upon and I believe this is a spelling error in one line it reads

    For many moons his might spirit has reigned and walked these halls

    should it be mighty spirit?

    This is filled with some wonderful imagery and it is a truly good read. Thanks for sharing : )


  • Kiddy
    March 2

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    Hello there,


    I liked your title and I wanted to know what this poem would be about...
    Title - 9/10

    Your take on the prompt is quite interesting and I really liked it. thoughtful and insightful...
    Theme - 8.8/10

    Your language is simple, yet elevated and the images are very good.
    Diction - 9.5/10

    I have nothing much to comment about presentation (Lines could have been shorter though).
    Presentation - 8.3/10

    You are creative and philosophical.
    Creativity - 8.9/10

    TOTAL - 44.5/50

    Lovely score. All the best in the contest.

    Love and regards
    Kiddy
    (Dr.V - Silent Judge)