sitting on this littered floor
im against the wall crying
i struggle for the door
i know that i am dying
the blood dripping from my finger
i take a deep breath i try to breath deeper
i stare at the blood i let it linger
in frount of me is the grim reeper
its hard for me to see clear
i try to steady my gaze
all i see is me, in a mirror
i seem to be in a daze
i look at these canyons you call vains
and try and remember why
i would inflicked myself with these pains
and pick up the knife and make myself die
my blood drips like a tears from a living child
i feel almost drunk with pain
i heard a clap of thunder, this is wild
i can hear the pouring rain...
i feel so sick im laying in my bed
and comfort now i cannot find
for i am already dead
not for real, but only in my mind
Author notes
sorry this isnt very good i wrote another one but lost it so i couldnt share my masterpiece with all you guys so sorry but yea i hope you enjoy
Written February 24th, 2004
A contest entry
- Something Good by Arslongavitabre1.
400 points, ended February 26, 2004, 13 entries
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This was a very sad poem... it's amazing how many people write about this. You have such talent... *sighs* well done.
God Bless you,
Jenna -
loved it
I liked this. I think it rhymed very well and the imagery was good indeed. It's very sad and wild and crazy. It's all like woa. Hehe, I like these kind of poems though and I thought this was very creative and unique. Keep writing.
Peace and love
MAD -
not really my type of poetry...i cant get into the free verse rhyming type....it jumps around a lot and it didnt really grabbed my attention so i didnt even finish...but ill check out some of your other work....keep writing it only gets better
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real good. i think it SHOWS ur emotions ...with all the imagery. i liked it.
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a little bit confussing story seams to jump which messes the flow a little i would have loved to see your other peice
thanks so much for entering
-Tate "keep penning"
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