thoughts flow on life's breath
perception found in focus
stills the restless mind
Author notes
http://benheine.deviantart.com/art/Child-of-Nature-113579684
Another stunning prompt
A contest entry
- Picture Prompts Haiku/Senryu (contest) by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended March 6, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems On Consciousness by maa.
777 points, ended March 24, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Very well expressed. And a great use of the form. Congratulations on the honorable mention
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I love the image of thoughts flowing on breath, both metaphorically and in the sense of meditative breath observation ... reading these few powerful lines is truly appeasing and slows down both breath and mind ...
thank you for this precious guidance in verse,
maa
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I really appreciate this piece. Nicely done. Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. I'm honored to have you show your work here.
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Wow, really says a lot in a little. it's awesome. loved it.
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Superb Plus +
Aye, 'tis a fine write, indeed. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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I never knew that three lines could speak so much. =)
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Thank you for your comments. I'm glad I attempted this format, it's amazing how difficult I found it, so getting feedback is really helpful.
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