friends ebb and flow
travelling this spider web
meals to feed the pulse of life
planets in their planes
some disappear into the folds
childhood snow beneath the rain
worn out workmates
neighbours gone to strangers
others fizz
then burn in dreams
bullets through the smoke of love
backfiring, fingers blistered
some stand firm though far away
birthday cards
Christmas calls
lonely rounds of births and deaths
no gods –
the world spins out from me
phenomenal
unique
yet, as I step towards the fall
dishonest in this love of self
time, my friend
my single minded enemy
whispers in my ear –
the truth, a joke
a laugh that rings
uplifting me
I have not met my greatest friend
death -
undone by craving for my heart’s return
it thereby pours life’s wine to let me drink
Author notes
Contest Prompt: "Explore the theme of 'My Heart Friend'".
A contest entry
- Winklings # 168 ~ For members and Allpoetry ~ Free Verse anyone? by Lyndon.
1750 points, ended March 30, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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One needs to give this a few
readings-through and the trouble is worth it. This poem belies its supertficial meaning, communicating the value of things that matter for, in 100 years, we shall all be dust. Thank you for your free verse plunge into moral philosophy. Ron.
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I love the final couplet, and the line 'lonely rounds of births and deaths'
Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow. That was fantastic. It was thought-provoking, interesting, and wonderful. Great write.
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good job
great read -
great job...will be reading more of your poetry...
there is always that thing that keeps us at something...that thing that makes us stay long, long after we've gotten tired of the bullshit and lies...death is so close yet we choose to wait for another day...perhaps it will get better? it never does, but we still have that other life-giving wine: hope
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wow this is deep and dark. exceptional write. the line with meeting death was frighteining. the title was captivating and the last few lines were very strong. well penned.
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pastiche
Tie the loose ends1
Exceptional!
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creative, try to tie the loose ends though
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Drink on, drink well, my friend. Great job on this interesting, deep write. Much to think about indeed.
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this is great!!!
it is a very deep write....
i really enjoyed the last stanza....
the whole thing speaks so much truth
i really enjoyed reading this, thank you so much for sharing your work
your Faerie
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Wonderful! There is much wisdom in your well written poem.
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People come and go, and we attach much importance to it, while ignoring what stays...
I enjoyed reading and found much to ponder.
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a loud 'bravo' for that ending! and so nice to know time had something nice to say for a change.
best of luck with it! (even if I am in that same contest lolol)
c
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