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Smile

The sun is not yet risen
as the cloud it too heavy
clinging around
but the sun still persistent
to raise in any minutes

I will follow the sun
to be persistent
to find my own
happiness.
Act!

Yes, and I  will come swift
to you
even run if possible
jump into your arm
then we will
smile, smile again!

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  • couldbeworse
    March 1

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    Yes, and I will come swift
    to you
    even run if possible
    jump into your arm
    then we will
    smile, smile again!

    i loved the excitement in your piece. I smiled while reading it

  • Liquid memories
    February 28
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    wonderful

    sounds so positive, caring outlook for tomorrow. The thoughts make me smile, as we become too bust living our lives, that each day pass us ans we forget the happiness we have missed. I like the way you shared this with us, and may you smile and smile.


    • Maedes
      March 1
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      Yes, trying to boost up the self confidence to survive and keep hoping for own happiness, even only for short time.
      My mom used to say: better late then never

      Thank you for your nice review


  • arafura gold member
    February 28
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    Very good my friend. I hope you are smiling like the last line says!


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    February 27
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    Excellent

    'tis a very fine write, indeed. I liked the manner in which you expressed your thoughts. Thanks for sharing this one with us. It also reminded me of an old poem from the ancient Sanskrit language (which is on my profile page): "Salutation of the Dawn". I think you might like reading it. It is in Sanskrit with a line by line translation into English.

    • Maedes
      February 28
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      Wow...

      "The Salutation of the Dawn, a poem from the ancient Sanskrit Language.

      A½ B:av:y: s:Øedn:ö!
      Look to this Day!
      j:iv:B:Üt:H kal:H O\:H . )aN:sy: )aN:H .
      For it is Life, the very Life of Life.
      Aesm:n:Î sv:lp:kal:ð s:ty:m:y:ð t:v: s:t:H s:ty:ö et:Ået:
      In its brief course lie all the
      Verities and Realities of your Existence;
      ev:kas:an:ndðn:
      The Bliss of Growth,
      km:üeÂ:y:a
      The Glory of Action,
      s::òndy:üS::ðB:y:a .
      The Splendor of Beauty;
      Êst:Ø svn:H .
      For Yesterday is but a Dream,
      Ã:st:Ø A:B:as:H .
      And Tomorrow is only a Vision;
      km:ükÙS:l:t:y:a A:c:ert:ð A½
      But Today well lived makes every:Î
      g:t:edn:aen: A:n:ndsvn:m:y:aen: B:v:ent: .
      Yesterday a Dream of Happiness, and every:Î
      B:aev:edn:aen: A:S:a)B:y:a jv:l:ent: .
      Tomorrow a Vision of Hope.
      At:H s:Øedn:ö A½ s:my:kÏ B:av:y:!
      Look well therefore to this Day!
      O\:a u\:aeB:v:ndn:a!
      Such is the Salutation of the Dawn.


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    February 27

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    This is really cute and I love the bit of metaphor at the beginning. Favourite lines, "but the sun still persistent/to raise in any minutes." Great sense of hope!
    Take care,
    ITNC.

    • Maedes
      February 28
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      Hi ITNC,
      I wrote this after taking breakfast -
      and see the sky was mix between gray and light orange
      that is why I wrote the sun is persistent to raise in any minutes
      ...
      glad you like it


  • DezaRAWR
    February 27
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    its cute i like it

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