Look at you,
growing up so fast
in this ever-changing world,
and learning the rules of this life,
and discovering which laws to break
and which to avoid,
and thus far you've figured out the basics,
how you can be anything you want to be,
so long as it's something others consider admirable,
and you should never judge a person by his looks,
and you should be friendly and kind to all people,
but only if they come from the right background
and are attractive to everyone else
and never seem to make mistakes,
and you should wear shirts that scream for peace and love,
yet start wars with your friends
and hate everyone and everything unfamiliar,
and be yourself,
be your own person,
but not enough not to be like everyone else;
yet you fight these rules,
these regulations that tell you who to be and who not to be,
what to do and what not to do
in this life and ever-changing world,
for you still want to be a writer,
and want it more than you could ever express aloud
although your peers mock that fact and find it disgraceful,
and you still find yourself growing closer
to those people at whom your peers sneer
and call ugly and fake and stupid,
yet amazingly you still look for and find the best in these persons,
and try to love them for what they have,
instead of what they lack,
and you wear the peace-love shirts
but you dislike fighting and confrontations
and hate makes you sick,
especially when it's directed at something different,
something new,
something "weird,"
so you try to be yourself,
you try to be your own person,
more than enough to be unlike anyone else,
and then you are labelled,
rebel, wierdo, freak,
prep, emo, punk,
skater, trouble-maker, dork,
yet there is only one label that truly seems to fit,
and that is
you.
Author notes
wrote this one for my composition class at the beginning of the year. it is written to the face in the mirror. so, basically, i'm talking to myself. another major part of the project was that the poem had to be one sentence long. so don't correct my grammar; i know what i'm doing. =)
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I would suggest making this left-aligned, and also include breaks. As one single read-through, it just didn't seem to work for me. My mind began to wander throughout. Other than those things: a nice poem that you have written here.
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well, this site won't let me left align, but i considered doing it on the printout. and i left out the breaks in it because when one is really thinking about something, there isn't a break in the thought pattern. it's like, stream of conciousness, ya' know? thank you for commenting tho, and i'm glad you like it. =)
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omfg. this is one of THE BEST poems i have read, EVER!!! I even printed it out and wrote a melody, it's so good. I love the idea. i love the words at the end. i love the conclusion. i LOVE your style. KUDOS!!!!! and never give up being who you are, which is YOU!!!
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sorry it's taken so long...
but thank you so much for the comment on my poem! it means so much to me! =))) maybe someday i could hear this melody? i've always wanted to inspire some kind of music... =)
thanks again!
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this is great. I like the whole "written to the face in the mirror" idea...
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and that is very true. This was definatly powerfull but im not sure if it was as raw as what i was looking for. Great job nonetheless, this was amazing
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Finally a poem that makes me think .
Despite my finalist list being almost full I cannot ignore your wonderful poem.
loved it flawless, loved your original ideas and the please stop to think about that aspect in your poem that made your work stand out for me.
welcome to round 2
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thank you!
thank you so much for letting me advance! i'll try my very hardest in round two!
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Reflective
It's interesting how you wrote this poem. You stated in your Author notes that it was facing a mirror to yourself. It kinda seems like a mirrored poem to me in a sense. Like, you state the "rules" in an ironic way and then answer them authentically. It was cool. I liked it a lot. Well written and thought out.
Just like a reflection that becomes alive!
Bravo!
Justified Inc.
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thank you!
thanks for the read and the comment!
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Ahhh...how I loved my creative writing class assignments. So often they'd make me look at myself in a rare light and more than not, I'd feel uncomfortable and vulnerable.
This piece seems to express that clearly. It's so hard to be all things to all people and yet, I tried desperately hard and sliced little pieces off of me consistently in my efforts.
I like the rambling overtones of this poem & would be curious to know what your final grade for it was. Sometimes, the best pieces we write are the ones no one really gets but us.
And by the way, all the labels you list at the end - I'd have fit all of them at some point and in some sense, still do. I guess as long as you are comfortable in your own skin, everything else...meh - who cares!
Good job! Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!
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thank you!
i'm glad you liked it! =) i actually made a 100 on the assignment. i know what you mean about feeling vulnerable; i don't really like opening up to others, but i guess it worked out for the best! =) thank you for commenting!
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