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Rendezvous with youth

Treasure
the
small unknown
moments.

The ones you dream..
Or meet face to face
when alone.

No preparation.
No shield.

Precise shots
at pure heart.
Innocence stolen innocence lost..
Too often paying the cost.

Loosing breath,
someone catches
the near drowning in someones kiss's.

The splendor
of idled moments
rationed out..
Half cup of hope,

dash of tenacious

doubts.

 

Sobers you

into life.

 

Skipped stones
waiting for the return.
So many places and things to learn.

Something so real awakens all you are,
takes over and  walks in your soul's deepened hall.

Familiar known moments

 

older.

Author notes

Reflecting and knowing.
Life's known moments.

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  • Progandother
    March 30
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    ...wow...this is very good...and unique to the others in structure and metre as well...which is what I like about poems...something that stands out...very few of the stanzas are identical that this represents the unpredictability of life...thank you for this one...it was an interesting read...

    Oliver


    • campanaro silver member
      March 30
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      Thank you

      so very much..I appreciate this.
      I'm glad you liked this write.
      Thanks again.
      Take care
      Love Peace
      campanaro


  • Callisto Athena gold member
    March 16

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    Lovely piece, this hon.. Good lessons, sometimes it's nice just to let words flow through you and this poem does that so well.. Thank you..


  • Heroesrox
    March 3

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    Wow! I really liked this one a lot. I love the addition of the last line. It really adds some of that 'Aha' moment to the piece! Thanks so much for the share!


    • campanaro silver member
      March 3
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      Thousand and one thanks:~)

      It is truly rewarding that this is appreciated so much.
      Sometimes things can really make sense when you just recall.
      Thanks again:~)
      Love Peace
      campanaro


  • Denerica silver member
    March 2

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    Brilliant!

    You just flow, the words are phenominal, loved the line, skipped stones waiting for the return. Really all of it. Blessings.

  • Just4u
    March 1

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    We often need a solitary moment just to remind us
    of who we really are. Reflection when used to learn
    a life's lesson is always a good thing, but we must use
    it to grow and not to get hostile to love, for when hate
    fills the heart, there is no room for new love to grow there.

    Hugs...Eddy

    Just wondering if you meant losing there, but either would
    work for me. The losing of breath or the loosening of one's
    breath thus freeing up some well need breathing room.


  • Broken-Rickie
    February 27

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    I feel like I'm on repeat when I comment your writes. You are truly amazing and even your writes are. I love you and you are the greatest. I get more and more impressed with each write I read...


    • campanaro silver member
      February 27
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      Thank you

      You are the kindest..
      glad you liked it my friend.
      Take care
      Love Peace
      campanaro


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 27

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    oh man...

    this is thought provoking! gosh you had some very strong lines in this my friend! i loved the lines:
    "Loosing breath,
    someone catches
    the near drowning in someones kiss's."
    very very creative!
    good job lady..


    • campanaro silver member
      February 27
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      Thank you!

      Thank you my friend for your
      kind compliment/comment.
      Your appreciated:~)
      Best
      Love Peace
      campanaro

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