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February Haiku

fog settles
in ditches and potholes
my knees ache

Author notes

This is a haiku written based upon the prompt of *****. It's actually ****ing right now and my knees are killing me. A classic look-out-the-window-what-do-you-see-and-howdya-feel piece. That's the technical term, right?

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  • Bruce silver member
    February 27, 2009

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    I like this! Nice job! The last line leaves lots of possibilities - makes the poem intriguing!


  • Itzamna
    February 27, 2009

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    of course its a technical term! if it wasn't i'd have never understood what you was saying! =P

    nice haiku though!