Tainted crimson diamond stars wend down...i, ghost; cheeks;
Salt coppery tasting exquisite pain torn fears.
Marionette whispers, "Moon's consort; craven, meek. "
Tourniquet stems brilliant gems of sparkled lace tears.
Old man moon melting, corpse clamored dark asylum,
Gunshot blood lily faces die; judgemental dead.
Serenity shattered babel; incoherent phylum.
Angel wept life's agony, moonbeam pierced head.
Above below no solace; cigarette reeked feathered grave.
Mental dreamnt helium balloons; no escape found outside.
Papers signed in triplicate; schizophenicly depraved.
They saw it all...clothe's button eyes seeething softly; died.
Anything I can do for you, my celebrated peer?
Everyones' mesmerized carousel, surreal serration whirled.
Once Moon shaft found mine head, as foretold by the Seer,
Agitation booked a three wheeled taxi driven from this world!
My medication on the shelf, locked behind razor meshed glass;
Never before dosage so high, me tragically bereft.
Forever grounded, my death a thickened untidy morass.
I, demented fragile debutaunte, into unknown mayhem left.
Author notes
I chose your second title: Escaped
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4949275
Dictionary: phy·lum (fī'ləm)
Biology. A primary division of a kingdom, as of the animal kingdom, ranking next above a class in size.
Linguistics. A large division of possibly genetically related families of languages or linguistic stocks.
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pretty good, pretty neat!!
you certainly paint pictures in words, reminds me of the rantings of a young "rimbaud" in it's disjointed exclammation!! well done!
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hey u ther
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This is so wild lass...
it was insanely fun to read...
your talent is frightening.
..moonbeam pierced head.....
You ..as i said in the past ...are the female tom waits of poetry....
you take it to the nines every time...
i know your work is no holds barred ...
its like you are letting something lose...
Fantastic lass...
I love your work....
always abstract and sophisticated.......
Much love gypsy,
Liam
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I shall seriously have to look into this tom waits, i am unfamiliar
thanks, your kind words come at a very good time, Liam, i love your wild praise, it is something i am unfamiliar with lately in my real life, oh well i am just whining, have a wonderful night
HUGS
Sheli
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Really great re-write! Thanks so much for the share and re-write of my piece! Good luck in my contest and thanks so much for entering!
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