Drink after drink feeling so great
burning my throat more and more.
With each powerfull sip
getting closer to the edge.
M y mind is filled with thoughts
thoughts I don't usually have.
Trying hard to stop drinking.
The craving is just too strong.
maby I am just too weak.
they are sending me to rehab,
to get help with my "little" problem.
Not realizing how "big" a problem I had.
My mind is going crazy
wishing I had some booze.
My hands are beginning to shake.
My throat burning like fire.
Breaking down in tears
night after night.
Begging for just one more sip
just one more taste.
Having a nervous beakdown.
Wanting it.
Craving it.
Needing it.
Rehab responds with a Shot.
Calming my nerves.
I fall asleep
with drinking on my mind.
Hours days and weeks pass.
The craving slowly fades.
Soon I was released back into the world.
Free of my alcohol addiction.
Being free is not that easy.
Harder than starting in the beginning,
But today I am free.
Yes free of my Addiction.
" ALCOHOL FREE "
Author notes
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2628846
Linkto original Poem.
Option #1 Rewrite a poem
A contest entry
- Steal A Poem... A Partners In Crime Contest by Partners In Crime.
850 points, ended March 19, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A well deserved Bronze on this one, so much feeling expressed...Mystic
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Addiction of any kind is so hard to break free from but there is hope to be found in this poem.
Mariana
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I cant say that i know about this first hand but i know what it feels like. My dad was an alcoholic and while i was too young to know what was going on when he drank, i saw the effect that it had on our family.
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Being free is not that easy.
Harder than starting in the beginning..
Yeah you're so right here.....
Good luck in this contest
XXJeannette
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Oohhh
I remember this contest
I think u did a wonderful job with tagging and revamping this.
-e
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I've read and compared your two poems, both very good, Ed I think breaking it into stanza's makes it easier to read and you've done a great job with that and the slightly different wording.
This is a heartwrenching piece. I know how difficult it is to rid ourselves of an addiction. I've been fortunate to not have ever had one as serious as alcholol, drugs or smoking myself but I know from dear ones experiences how hard it is. Seeing a loved one go through such a thing and then seeing them go through the hardship of quiting... a bittersweet mixture of emotions...
A good poem, and a super message within.
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
Dee
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