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Be loved my Beloved

She closes her eyes and lays ready to sleep
Except for "I love you" says not a peep,
She amazes and surprises me every single day
I can't help but think somehow she'll be taken away.

How could something so perfect be made to last
All that's good should be taken away fast,
This girl yeah this girl is the one for me
I lay eyes closed and breathe in the ecstasy.

I know it's crazy but I need to say
I'll love this girl forever starting today,
She's so perfect in my eyes I can see
Her and me so simply meant to be.


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  • Dark Lady0801
    February 28, 2009

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    Wow, I really didn't know that there were guys on this site. I could feel the love and adoration coming off of you in waves through this poem. Simply amazing. Wonderful work!


  • FaeRae gold member
    February 28, 2009

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    Other than the ryme being a little forced, this flowed well. My husband tells me every day that I will leave him one day. I won't, trust me. Trust her.


  • AwesomeJoshsome
    February 27, 2009
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    Bernard Loves Bernice