when morning wakes itself
when the cloudnest kicks us out
we fall for free
A contest entry
- haiku only! by fishbubbles.
900 points, ended June 24, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Your verse is quite good, didn't work as haiku to me, but I liked the message here.
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good! I always felt irritated by Haiku, but you and lilac moon have done well with it. you may have a convert. just please kick me gently (I'm getting old and I feel things more easily - and painfully!) - ocerus
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I love the ending. Not that I don't love the whole thing. But yeah, nice.
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the theme is skywards and opened to more meanings.... great write... very thoughtful too... all the best
Love and regards
Kiddy
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