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Saturn's Desire.

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Tell the -world- of her past,

Her stories, her glories...

Everything they never wanted to know.

 

Understand the *desire* for appreciation,

Nervous inspiration revealing more truth.

Indignation. See in the  d i s t a n c e?

Value that vision... There's a whole world out there.

Euphoric understanding evades your capacity.

Revelations! Yes, you have finally (se)-(en) yourself.

Sell the b*e*a*u*t*y of your words,

Explanations...are not needed. It's You, after all.

 

I breathe everytime I see your face,

Stop. Yes, stop. The world looks at you...

 

You react... anger [surrounds] you, like the rings of Saturn

Overestimate everyone's r{e}a{c}t{i}o{n}...

Undertones. They tell the story you've passed on. >>>

 

     (The universe does not revolve around you.)

 

 

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Will This Do, lady? Hope you get it... I mean, I just DP'd a TT!!

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  • XcPrincessB
    March 22, 2009

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    WOW

    Once again in the contest I have found that I think the poem would be the same without the dirty/pretty stuff.
    Without it ur poem would still vbe AMAZING. I am torn between loving and hating this girl you talk of. I read this about 10 times trying to figure out which.
    The lasty verse and the last solitary line both rock my world. U have crafted a very good piece of poetry here.
    Congrats and thanks for entering


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    February 27, 2009

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    WOW You've finally done it and the end line just made it peeerrrfect!! tehehehe great job here!!!

    and you thought the picture wouldn't do anything for you?? Love it xxx