I'm garbage to her.
To me she's a queen.
When will I learn.
It's not how it seems.
Broken knuckles.
Red in the face.
But she only chuckles.
Enjoying the taste.
Salting my affliction.
Her hatred is love.
Feeding the addiction.
Of a damaging dove.
In all her distaste.
I am to blame.
Her beauty displaced.
I'm going insane.
Possessive dominant.
And a lost cause.
Sickness prominent.
Bearing her claws.
But I still have sympathy.
For inside there's innocence.
Undeserved empathy.
Yet lust is imminent.
A contest entry
- You Make Me Love You. Prewrites now allowed. by Condemd RyeZing.
475 points, ended March 9, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Heartbreaking
The flow is great. The love is amazing -
You are amazing. The love this person feels, is just heart breaking. You really know how to grab the readers attention. Beautiful.
Rose -
The emotions in this poem are expressed clearly, and there is good rhyme and flow.
Best of luck in the contest!
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A very good piece here expressing your emotions crystal clearly. I think you have enough knowledge to know what to do when faced with this, protect your heart at all costs. Thanks for sharing, peace.
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Amazing
All I can really say is that that was GREAT! the way it flowed was wonderful -
wow
your poem is fucking amazing. i love the way you get you words to flow so seemlessly. this sounds like something i would write only a lot better.
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I freaking love this. It has amazing rhythm to it and it flows beautifully. It's also very emotional and powerful. I can't even find a favorite part because I love all of it. Good Job!!
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Very good write. love the first stanza.
Lots of depth and insight. Nice job. Thanks for entering.
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Oh wow, I agree, this is lovely. I reallly like it, and the emotion is amazing. I think this is very good, keep it up. :]
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i like it
i love your poem. it had depth to it... and its lovely....it is very understanding....
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