I tore it from my empty arms
that rest beside my broken heart
and threw it down upon the ground.
Their bare hands took it up,
and even with mass calculation,
they never lived to love again.
The bickering bishop
of the Roman Rite,
retrieves his purity
by way of thievery,
as he plunders Burgundy,
in the French countryside,
where he meets his connection
and completes the revolution.
I bend to retrieve it,
to offer it
to those who seek
the challenge to roam,
who dare
to feel the night.
To those who move out
beyond the pack.
They derail the tracks
that scorch the leg
of the blackened wolf,
who holds the mark
of the endless gauntlet.
Author notes
Gauntlet: 1- a glove that is used for protection
which can cover part of arm.
2- a religious piece of attire that
originated in France but then used by Romans
3- a type of railroad track that overlaps in narrow areas.
4- used in phrasing - pick up - take up - or - throw down.
5- A white mark found on a wolfs paw and leg,
making it look as if they had a long white glove on.
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I don't know why but I can hear echoes of Bernard Shaw's St. Joan. I particularly like how you have structured the little lone stanza " To those who move out..... I like well structured "guid black print".
Well done!
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Nice job. I agree that this poem has a strong medieval flavor to it. I enjoyed it. Well done.
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medieval visuals in my head
you are an excellent story teller..the skill spills into your poetry and makes your characters 3D. S3 is pure musical notes..has a lilt and rolls out . I return the compliment to you. Every time I read your pen I am inspired to stretch my bounderies.
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Well, Poet; you invited the world in to read your masterpiece, and I clicked, although I knew I would find an excellent write here, as usual. What can I say that hasn't already been written by everyone else?!!? Great job!! I love the title, and found your muse has captured the essence of darkness with its endless, shrouded gauntlet. Write on, brother!! I'm wishing you all the very best... 
Peace & hugs,
xx Cyn xx
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This is wonderful. I love the third stanza. It flows well.
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Thank you for your entry
This struck me as being a heart, or Faith. Either way to cast it away it leaves you with a hole inside of you. to then manage to retrieve it.. you should hold on for a long time.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Shari
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were you a part of the Knight's Templar in a past life?? If sooooooo- my blood is that of the Royal.. psst- good write!
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I so know of what you are writing about here!!! It is not just simple fictional poetry- it also holds truth.. Yay you!
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you always write everything so beautifully every poem fom you is like a gourmet feast to this hungry poet
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all this from a visit to the doctor...
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Great flow, I particularly like the last stanza! Thumpity thump thump
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i like the second stanza.
its like, with everything they had planned, they thought they had everything figured out, but you cant figure out love. or thats waht i got out of it...probably not what it was but..
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This swirls. The variation of sounds mated with just the right amount of alliteration and rhyme make it ring out to the ears like the swell of a symphony. Your use of the english language in terms of aesthetic phonetics is by far my favorite on the site.
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I like the feeling of progression that seems to occur, while the fragmented stanzas really somehow give it a feel of being quite genuine.
Very nice use of the word gauntlet also, using all aspects of its' definition in one poem, though on the other hand this feels a little bit too deliberate, if you know what I mean.
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You truly possess a masterful skill with words kudos my friend.
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The bickering bishop
of the Roman Rite,
retrieves his purity
by way of thievery,
as he plunders Burgundy,
in the French countryside,
where he meets his connection
and completes the revolution.
I bend to retrieve it,
to offer it
to those who seek
the challenge to roam,
who dare
to feel the night.
Spellbinding, superb writing here. How did I miss this one?
BRILLIANT write sir, honestly. There's not a word or a line I dont like. THIS is the reason I love poetry. THIS is the reason I will always read you, AND enjoy your musings.
Damn it, but I didnt think you could top yourself.
Okay, so I guess it shows, I really love this.
Love always,
jin
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wow a wonderful story like verse that has a gothic feel ....an excellent read poet
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hey love. ah, how i did miss your beautiful poetry on my down time. Such a lovely job, I loved it.
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Very clever and thought provoking. The second stanza really grabbed my attention. Good job!
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You have made excellent use of all the definitions. I liked the more traditional form you have used here as well, and the background choice accentuates the the wild, historical adventure and ancient fantasy the piece hearkens to throughout. I am also thankful for your explanation in your authors notes, which brings the meanings of the stanza's into more complete appreciation by the readers.
Great job!
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nice phrasing and imagery....nicely done here, thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of work!
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All in all, not bad ...
but you need to remove the "s" from "rests" in the second line. Not sure what meaning there is here, but sometimes poetry doesn't have to "mean" anything. That said, the second stanza is pure genius.
The only serious question I have about this is "endless gauntlet". It doesn't seem as though "endless" makes all that much sense when referring to gauntlet. I'd have thought "imperious" would work better.
Anyway, it's nice to see you haven't lost your touch.
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Excellent rhythm. Excellent concept. Excellent poem...excellent definitions xD
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Amazing how the words flow n sometimes u r just speechless.... I mean no word at all... its an amazing use of words here..Love it as always ......
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OMG, a really amazing poem. full of beauty and ease, graceful and beautiful. Truly astonishing. Well done Liam!
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very well written as always. loved the word choices and the idea behind this poem. well done
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This poem was amazing. It is truly a great piece of writing. It had such a great flow. I look foward to reading more of your work.
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Mr. Poe, this is EXCELLENT!!
As it began so it continues...
I don't really have anything to add to this..seems pretty rich to me.
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this is excellent, i really enjoyed reading. keep up the great work
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Bravo!!
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Excellent write my friend, love the flow and cadence of this. A stunning write indeed.
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Wow
A stunning write again mate! Great title and good imagination. I think that Shakespear would have enjoyed reading this very much. "Here's lookin' at you kid." -c
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Another great poem
If you hadn't added those definitions at the end in your notes I would have been a bit baffled by this one, though I believe that it is still possible to apreciate the beauty of words put together in the right way by the right person without a complete intellectual understanding of the work. Thank you for being thoughtful enough to explain it to the likes of myself. Jimmy(fatalfraud74)
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Very well done. I would not have thought of using so many different definitions for the same word in a single coherent poem.
Mike
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