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Marry Me Today...

 

 

 

You're the fire that fuels

my addiction.

 

You're the disease

that ignites this

affliction.

 

You're the food

the feeds

my butterflies.

 

You're the reason

i wake to see

the sun rise.

 

I live and breath you,

this heart in my chest

it beats for you.

 

Take my hand,

lets run away,

let me know its

all okay.

 

Marry Me Today.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • fatizeh
    September 27, 2009
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    i just lovvvve ds piece..tooo goood..awesome


  • Mr. Alternative
    July 28, 2009

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    LOVELY!

    WOW! This was really something! I was totally intrigued all the way through! Although the pic you posted is beautiful and shows the imagery in the poem, this piece would've been stronger and more powerful if you would've placed some imagery in the poem itself along with posting the pic. Also your ending is nice but is a bit of a cliche and very vague. However, on the positive side of things. . .with all that being said. . .YOUR WORDING AND WORD CHOICE IN THIS PIECE IS ABSOULTELY IMPECCABLE! Really though! "You're the fire that fuels my addiction." and "You're the food that feeds my butterflies." were not only the best lines in this write but my favorites as well! As I said before you held my attention from beginning to end and with some editing this poem will be 100 times more exquisite than it already is!


  • Andi. gold member
    July 18, 2009
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    gorgeous and sweet


  • AwesomeJoshsome
    July 7, 2009

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    awwuh it's sweet like a sugar coated awesomeness! Your a great writer even though you'll probably argue with me about that. I love your picture choices

    "You're the food

    the feeds

    my butterflies."

    Change the word "the" cause your just making no sense love!
    -Parker!


  • She Hides Her Pain
    June 27, 2009

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    This really sweet kellena. It reminds me so much about my fiance' Spencer. This is how i feel about him. keep up the good work.

    Love,
    Crystal


  • Badass Brea
    June 24, 2009

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    I love this!
    & all the pictures with it!
    my favorite part was this:
    "You're the food
    the feeds
    my butterflies."

    I found the food to my butterflies. Whenever I see him, or know Im gunna see him later I get the craziest butterflies & we've been together for almost a year, but I still feel that, which I find to be a great thing.

    I love how you captured love & being together forever.

    Great Write!
    exOHex
    Brea




  • prettyemogirl
    June 13, 2009
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    its beautiful
    it captures the yearning of love and the dedication


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    June 11, 2009
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    This is cute. full of love and longing, longing to be lost in that person forever


  • voo-doo poetess
    June 8, 2009
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    Oh yes. Fantastic write!


  • Misanthropic soul
    May 30, 2009
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    sweet

    thats a cool one kels. love it


  • Lizylace
    May 19, 2009
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    I love it! It's very true all the feeling... It's very simple but full of meaning!


  • dippy
    May 19, 2009
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    good

  • dippy
    May 19, 2009
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    almost a song in there. very goo


  • Crazychook
    May 16, 2009
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    Aww this is so tute! And it flows well too Double bonus!


  • pale valentine
    May 15, 2009

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    This is super adorable

    By the way, your display name is really catchy.

    ...Zombieade. ^.^


  • FreeFalling911
    May 13, 2009
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    This is so simple yet so deep. I really enjoyed reading it

  • evelynxxoo
    May 5, 2009
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    ahh so much love here awsome


  • historygeek6190
    April 29, 2009
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    lovely

  • Droppdeadd
    April 12, 2009

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    I just re-joined this website and this is the first poem i've read on here for at least two years. I found you randomly. it's brilliant. =)


  • dime-diva
    April 9, 2009
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    this is boss homie


  • peadiotrocity101
    April 5, 2009
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    Great poem!

    I liked it.

  • magnusprime1
    April 5, 2009
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    i loved it. short and sweet. it had everything it needed to describe your love.....beautiful


  • Beautiful Sin-
    March 31, 2009

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    I read it again, and I changed my mind ^_^
    I love this. The imagry is great. very beautifully penned.
    Keep it up!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 28, 2009

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    So true and so passionate worded work of the thoughts of the heart you shared in such a warm poetic manner..love it..and thanks..


  • tears.of.silence gold member
    March 17, 2009

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    I always said I'd never poetry and say Awww. but lately I've clicked on some poems that just make me go awww and this is one of them... You did a really good job on this. Kahy


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 14, 2009
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    So strong emotions and well thought piece you conceived with the basic flow of the love around the words..well done..and thanks for sharing..


  • starjacket silver member
    March 14, 2009

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    Lovely piece and I like the pictures a lot. Great job, here. Keep up the great work! Thanks so much for the share! Best wishes to you!


  • Beauty Of Silence
    March 12, 2009

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    Awww!

    i like the progress in this poem. its so simply put yet so deep. beautiful emotions portrayed so well. keep writing


  • MaidMistaken
    March 10, 2009

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    beautiful

    i love the cute simplicity of this. love is like that though. full of complicated spleandor, yet simple. It rarely makes sense but human emotions often do. keep writing dear. <33smooch!


  • Snap.Crackle.Pop
    March 6, 2009

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    Wow,
    this is an amazingly adorable write.
    It is short, and sweet.
    I absolutely loved the rhyming,
    and my favorite part would have to be:




    You're the fire that fuels
    my addiction.

    You're the disease
    that ignites this
    affliction.

    You're the food
    the feeds
    my butterflies.

    You're the reason
    i wake to see
    the sun rise.

    Banna.bean.


  • Romeo Dragonheart
    March 6, 2009
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    its a cute write with the pics and background to match, cute and heartfelt great work
    Romeo


  • RAWR-itsPurplePixie
    March 6, 2009
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    Aww!
    This is so pretty and sweet!
    The pictures are so cute and fit well!
    Great job! =]


  • SwaGGtastic
    March 4, 2009
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    Really Sweet!

    This is a Good write.. Enjoyed reading


  • Qjones22
    March 4, 2009
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    great


  • couldbeworse
    March 2, 2009

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    how very sweet it is!!! i really liked your touching piece. the pics were great too.

    You're the food

    the feeds

    my butterflies.


  • larkbird
    March 1, 2009

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    great poem. I especially loved the fuel that feeds my butterflies. Thats a good one.
    Like I said, a really great write, and the pic is the cutest.
    God Bless,
    Larkbird


  • Fulabeans
    February 28, 2009
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    Awwwwe Yo!!!

  • lil elmo
    February 28, 2009
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    i like ur poems i even like the pixs u put 2


  • Salt Therapy Greeters member
    February 26, 2009
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    awwwwwwwww

  • Beautiful Sin-
    February 26, 2009
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    Beautiful.


  • August Starlight gold member
    February 26, 2009

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    Beautifully written!
    I absolutely adored it because it's soo sweet.
    Even when I'm in a relationship I have trouble with love poems like this.
    I hope you two do get married... you seem to have a lot of love for him.

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