We spoke in different versus
To each other today.
And everything you told me to believe;
I believe.
But now I'm afraid
That you won't see me,
But the one that I played as.
I've been touching you
In my own defaults.
But these are approaching
Stormy days!
In a solid mind,
We let you all decide...
How much do you fuel enemies?
Take caution
If you are going
To leave me behind.
'Cause I've been waiting here.
Waiting by this great oak.
Waiting for your presence into my life.
Oh, so sincere.
I've been touching you
In my own defaults.
But these are approaching
Stormy days!
In a solid mind,
We let you all decide...
I heard your voice and I wonder why...
Why those tones are hiding your true self?
Tell me...and I won't turn away.
Wait for me 'cause I am on the way
I've been touching you
In my own defaults.
But these are approaching
Stormy days!
In a solid mind,
We let you all decide...
'Cause I've been waiting here.
Waiting by this great oak.
Waiting for your presence into my life.
Oh, so sincere.
A contest entry
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beautiful piece...
"'Cause I've been waiting here.
Waiting by this great oak.
Waiting for your presence into my life.
Oh, so sincere." -- these four lines cannot get much more awesome!
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GREAT WRITE
WoW.. I don't know where to begin becuase it was all so good.. kept me reading & usually i get lost about half way & un interested.. u sure did put a new twist on a great picture! Nice Job.
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Hmmm, kinda lost for words! This in my opinion is fantastic! There's nothing to point out or give advice on, but you knew that,right?Excellent write!
~Kimberly~
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This is amazing! Wow. I think it's really good. If this isn't the 'greatest' I imagine you're pretty good.
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This is a very beautiful, lyrical piece. It made me think of days long past where masks and fallacies hid ones true face. I like your repeated stanzas and the unique break they give to each piece of your puzzle. Reading them again and again is perfect, for they are never quite the same once you read the stanza before. Each new read brings new ideas and new images to play with.
Seems like everyone is waiting for something these days.
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