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Child By E.L.T.

Child, child why do you cry,
The question is not who but, why,
You ask yourself why does it have to be a choice,
I tell you simply to rejoice,
That you have even a choice,

Child who has lost their way,
Their are words that I can say,
Still in my heart I kbnow you need to see,
That things are not always easy,

This life, child, is filled with comprimise,
So tell me who your promise to,
This thing tearing you apart,
Who wins this part?

You want to know who to love,
I think it comes from who hasn't used you as a glove,
Fathers are good Mothers are sweet,
But the thing is which beats who,

Show me who you love more child,
Is it the person who wished to hold you,
Or the person who didn't know what to do,
The choice is youra alone,

I have to say that this is your regret,
Cause either way you lose a bet,
Which is worth losing my child,
Please do choose for i fear for your mind.

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  • KaylynKhaotic
    March 16

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    This is really good. very complex and sometimes the poem doesn't really flow, But that adds to it in a good way. I like the emotion, it is very well thought out piece and It was very inticate. Keep it up.