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Escape From the Chaos

 

 

 

 

 

I see my heartsease looking at the sky,
searching for heaven's solace and peace,
but no stars wander in moonlight's lie.

My modern life has no time to just sigh,
for brief interludes where stresses decease,
I seek my heartsease looking at the sky.

Soul searching thoughts fade to life rushing by,
internal desires that never release,
but no stars wander in the moonlight's lie.

Nature's sweet bliss I cannot deny,
calm plazas to find within mind's caprice,
I see my heartsease looking at the sky.

Yearn for brief moments and wonder why,
forgotten the path to where time can cease,
but no stars wander in the moonlight's lie.

Pray busy world hush, let me one brief sigh,
let me feel my strength in moments increase,
I see my heartsease looking at the sky
but no stars wander in the moonlight's lie.

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  • Ellis gold member
    August 5

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    This proclaims self-awareness of the missing quite contemplation, therefore knowledge of it is not entirely lost!

    • Thank you Ellis, I think the day we no longer know such peace exists we are probably done for.

  • A VERY ELLIGANT WRITE

    This was beautiful written in wisdom my friend. I love the last stanza this put a calm in my heart. Peace be wih you.

  • Nicely done. Strong anchor lines keep this moving in the right direction and you have a graceful knack for using interesting words.

    I love Villanelle and I enjoyed this one. Thank you. ~Pamela


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    March 24

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    Oh for peace and quiet, this is beautiful Sis. It has a very calming effect on this reader ... thank you

    Suz


  • justapoet
    March 19

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    What an amazing write. I enjoy poetry but my writing comes nowhere near to the beauty I have found on this site. Your pen is a talented one indeed and this is the kind of poetry I will hopefully one day come close to penning. Well done Ceridwens Soul


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 15

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    Y'know... you can't half write.

    Line 3 has a split infinitive. I don't know how you feel about those things - some folks mind about them, some don't.


  • Patpowers silver member
    March 15

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    Nice work on this Jem. Touching to read a poem from your pen! THANKS!


  • maralisa silver member
    February 26

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    aw a wonderful powm I love your imagery and depth throughout thank you for sharingmaralisa

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