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onwards

sanity
    has left my soul
and I
    have nothing more
but this
    wrenched life
that got
    everything but disaster.

I am
  prepared to
      die.

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would this be okay?

A contest entry

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  • OnePissedFilipino
    February 26

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    straight to the point, raw, edgy and no beating around the bush. i enjoyed this piece but also worries me a bit


    • kishi-tenshi
      February 26
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      Yep, but this is just for the contest, so don't worry!!! I am prepared to die, and yes, there are times that I really feel like life is a disaster for me, but overall, my life is generally full of surprises....

      Thanks for the comment anyways!!!!


  • going nowhere
    February 26

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    first.. i liked the fact that you used purple. i am going through lent now to prepare for easter and this sets that tone... the losing all, and preparing to die to self so it can be filled with something more...
    when i read this, it seems that it can be taken that way or it can be taken as a more hopeless feel.. that all had been lost and you are prepared to leave it all... but when i read it the first time, i read it more with the preparation to give up what is needed so the sanity may return. well done. thank you for your entry.