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What Says It Best.

Oh, to be bathed in the silky fall
of your blond tresses, as lips collide,
and become love's glue.
Your eyelashes ascending to grant me
a passionate gaze so soft yet
that still hardens my tenderest needs.

To spend long hours giggling
over the sheer joy of being two,
candlelight dinners and wishes blown
as we suckle dessert and then slow dance
for an hour in your living room.

Imbibing on two fine wines,
one being the grapes
fermented of your choice.
I am seldom picky about
glasses shared, and the other
being your stereo lips,
both above and below
as I drink deeply and you
create a rainbow of your hips
bent in the rapture
of the multi-colors of love.

There is never enough time
to spend with such beauty,
the artist in me craves,
the canvas of your skin,
my tongue brushing softly,
finger-painting smiles
on your lovely face.

Love is a puzzle that requires
two pieces joined,
in a world full of so many
disassembled,
What a finished picture
we would make,
in the center of it all,
framed with loving care.

But this is only one poem
of the many accolades

you will receive,
words spent in the loneliness
between the lines,
yet longing for the soft curves
of your warm  embrace.

I place no faith in
non-physical tributes,
I express myself best,
in the silence of a kiss,
laughter whispers in my eyes,
and love grows warm
upon my fingertips.

Come take your place
in my heart and together
we shall find what says it best.




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  • LordNightAngel
    March 13, 2009

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    Great work. The imagery was heaven sent. The flow was enthralling. Congratulations on a much deserved Gold. Thank you for entering and allowing us all to share your interpretation of Love.


  • tearyeyedbutterfly
    February 26, 2009

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    This piece is devastatingly beautiful!! I was absolutely entranced by the gentle passion dripping from these lines and the spell-binding imagery!

    I especially loved stanzas four and five...they are breath-taking!

    I also love this part:

    "I express myself best,
    in the silence of a kiss,
    laughter whispers in my eyes,
    and love grows warm
    upon my fingertips.
    Come take your place
    in my heart and together
    we shall find what says it best."

    What a brilliant way to conclude this treasure of a poem! A girl might wander if you're just trying to get her in bed, but it's all said in such a passionate explosion of poetic beauty that I doubt she would care..in fact, I imagine she would go rather willingly...lol.

    The only thing I might change would be to remove the ugly girl pic from the top...lol! Thanks for entering!


    • artis
      March 11, 2009
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      not ugly at all, those enticing petulant lips, that gaze that makes one want to crawl inside your head and study the wonder there, always was partial to blondes real or bottled, and your comment was a lovely critique, not often seen here. Thanks ever so m

      it is truly appreciated. And of course the topic was to die for. If one could truly share these words with the caliber of a girl such as you, willingly going to bed would be just one of the highlights of many wonderful hours, weeks months, years spent. have a lovely love and soon. ~~~Artis

  • Aaron50
    February 26, 2009
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    Beautiful

    This is simply beautiful