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Make Me

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Make Me


Close the door
And turn off the light
Come adore
Mi amore
In fantasy and delight
Come my love, explore

For so long
I’ve waited for you
Come along
We belong
Entwined in a love for two
Come... and make me strong

Close the door
And lie here with me
Make me soar
Fill my core
Come take me to ecstasy
Make me want you more

 

 

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Author notes

Art by: indospan

Shadorma:
The Shadorma is a Spanish poetic form made up of a stanza of six lines (sestet) with no set rhyme scheme. It is a syllabic poem with a meter of 3/5/3/3/7/5. It can have many stanzas, as long as each follows the meter. Little is known about this poetic style's origins and history but it is used by many modern poets today. This variation of the haiku, which is evident by its syllable pattern, can be seen in use in many writing venues.

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  • Cup-a-Joe
    April 8
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    Whisper this to me.
    please.
    Joe

  • SimplySonnets gold member
    March 23
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    Admire your experimentation

    Your authors notes are a joy, you do a wonderful job spreading knowledge. first I thank you for that.

    The poem itself is a delight in the extreme, considering the discipline held within the form. a first class poem, thank you, you are indeed a philosopher.


  • thepoetssoul
    March 5

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    This is a wonderful piece of poetry you have written.
    The rhythm and flow is in exellent form.
    Very sensual, splendidly done indeed.

    Tony


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    March 4

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    Very nicely erotic; so very tasteful
    A fine sensual piece, for sure
    I think you got Eyes' blood pressure raised
    Seriously, well done!


  • Bedroom Eyes
    March 4

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    Alrighty then!!

    Methinks that the visuals this piece brings up are SMOKIN

    Love the flow and the way you always make form seem soooooooo effortless. Quite the steamy piece!!! (I think my eyebrows got singed)

    Greg


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 4

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    Softly sensual and gorgeous! So inviting!! i've never seen this form before, it's fab!


  • Bev Hilderman gold member
    March 4
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    Very nice write.

  • TonyT
    March 4

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    A gentle nudging can often get the ball rolling.
    I love the soft playfulness of this akin to a soft touch
    at the end of a hard day...

    Tony

  • silverfish
    March 3
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    the rhythms of the verse and rhyme are perfectly, sensually sublime. i think. -s

  • Purrsanthema
    March 1
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    How lovely, sensual, and tasteful! I've never heard of the Shadorma. Thanks for the lesson!


  • nordicsky silver member
    March 1

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    Here I sit counting syllables, acutely aware of how much I have to learn about the art of writing poetry. I have enough trouble getting my thoughts on paper without having to worry about rhyme schemes and syllables. You, however, seem to have complete control of words, they do your bidding and jump into the right place to form beautiful lines of fluid poetry.

    Envy, envy, envy,
    But lots of love, Peter


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    February 28

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    While the style of poem may be completely foreign to me I do like it and as usual you are proving yourself to be the queen of erotica. Great job


  • lovemuffins
    February 27
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    beautiful poem!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 27
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  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    February 27

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    oooh, very pretty. i like this style, it's very different to me. fits well with the pic.

    kAsSiE

    ps
    good luck in the contest

  • Papagallo
    February 27

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    My gosh this is beautiful. If I were a thief, I would steal your words for a love poem to my wife. Have no fear I do not plagiarize. I compose my own poems and songs of love. The words are beautiful and may the contest favor you,


  • cgirl0410 silver member
    February 27

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    The rhythm of this piece is incredible. I really enjoyed reading this. It kept an easy flow and it had a lot of feeling within the words. Great piece. - cgirl0410


  • paulcreates silver member
    February 26
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    Wondered when you'd ask...

    Paul


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 26

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    well now this is simply breathtaking.
    Thanks for showing us how its done.

    Love
    Passions


  • Angelflower
    February 26

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    how interesting!!! I really loved this!!! Though I've never heard of this certain form before I really liked it! thank you very much for your wonderful entry! best of luck in the contest!

    Angel


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    February 26
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    Awesome poem! Very sensual! And in a form I have never heard of! Wonderful!


  • Daizee silver member
    February 26

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    I agree that you do sensual fantastically. You draw the reader in without being obscene or vulgar and paint us a picture that enthralls.

    Love,
    Stacy


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    February 26

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    awww I love it sis this is truly marvelously written. You do an incredible job with ur pieces. I love it!!!!


  • Rovingone gold member
    February 26
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    Something like this makes the heart race. I envy your amore. Such a erotic, sensual delight.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 26

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    Uh, sure let's see, it's about an eight hour flight to Florida...what’s the nearest airport to your place?

    Just kidding, wow, you do sensual so well Amera and I concur with Mr. PerVertuous.

    Love, mj.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 26

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    WOWEE!!!

    Goodness!! you have turned up my temperture, and as you know, l.o.l. i can get quite heated!!
    wow sweet lady this is an amazing piece of work, and a new(to me) form that i automatically like..this is being bookmarked! thanks for the fire lady!


  • StarEyes
    February 26

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    Holy Moly Sis! I think I may need a cold shower now! WOW! What a read! This is fantastic! You really did great with this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • artis
    February 26

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    Phew, fill my core, what a superb metaphor,

    as the apple of my eye absorbs the stem of my passion. This is what dreams are made of. Sleep don't fail me now.~lol~~Artis

  • laiqua aran
    February 26

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    Who could refuse such n invitation?




    Your Elven Kin


  • PerVirtuous
    February 26

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    You have a singular talent when it comes to erotic poetry. You speak in almost non-sexual terms and the imagination weaves it together into a torrid tantric tapestry. I love the dual interpretation of the title. It speaks both physically and spiritually. I think AP shivers whenever you get that look in your pen.


  • azlyn gold member
    February 26

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    How sensually beautiful. The form flows so well for this write. Best of luck in the contest!


    Az

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