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......Dying to self......


You kill yourself
in many ways
but may be lucky
to get reborn

rise up again
like the phoenix
leaving behind ashes
wonderment
a single tear

Dying to Self

A contest entry

29 words

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  • Sandygram
    March 21
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    A lovely poem . A delight to read this morning. Nice imagery. Take care, Sandy


  • adsaige
    February 26

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    First note: you spelled 'phoenix' wrong.
    Second note: I like the reference to it, even though the phoenix in definition depending on where you go, it is considered a very stupid immortal being...building its pyre to destroy itself. Yes, I like that alot.


  • going nowhere
    February 26
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    very nice reference to the phoenix.... to rise through ashes. well done. thank you for your entry.