I won the battle but I still feel like I'm losing the war,
And I find my self crumbling to the cold floor.
I want to believe the old me is dead
But could my disease of personality only have spread?
Maybe I haven't changed, I've just become a better liar,
I'm still the same girl who gets burned playing with fire.
My attraction to the worst has seemingly grown,
And all because I can't stand to be alone.
Yet this time it's different, I'm no longer the blameless
This time it's him, yet I feel so shameless.
He is completely unaware of what I am capable of,
He's naive enough to think anything can be conquered by love.
Is it possible he is right? Could he be my cure?
I want to believe it, but it's to soon to be sure.
He understands that I am damaged goods, both inside and out,
And I am shocked to realize this doesn't cause him to doubt.
For the first time someone see's past the scars and the wall,
He sees that sometimes I jump instead of just waiting to fall.
And through him I begin to realize the person I can be
But I'm afraid without him I'll slip further into me.
So I refuse to sabotage this chance to do something right
I'm taking this chance, even though I'll have to fight.
He is my soldier, my superman and lover
And with him I know there's so much more to discover.
So tonight I fall asleep to the sound of his breath and heartbeat
I'll wake up tomorrow with the one who makes me complete.
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Para siempre mijo, te prometo voy a amar, hasta la muerte.
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WOW! this is one of your best pieces i think. Brings me close to tears cuz though I have never felt that its all I want in my life too.
I just hope he makes you happy.
Beautiful and pretty well done, honest and truthful, wonderful write.
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This was such a beautiful poem.. So much here that can be a poem of it's own!!! I loved the flow and suitable rhyme in this write as well. you did such a wonderful job.. I really loved how you wrote your emotions out seemingly so easily, yet i'm sure that it was hard... You really touched the readers with this write, as I'm sure many will and can relate to it.. Thank you very much for sharing..
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Bold and Beutiful
"I'll wake up tomorrow with the one who makes me complete, I love that." -
My attraction to the worst has seemingly grown,
And all because I can't stand to be alone.
i was so there, until... well, i just got tired of being hit and cheated on. thank you for sharing this with me as it ends full of hope. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. unfortunately, i do not have the points to applaud this as i just put them all into a huge contest. viyanna rosemarie
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wow! this is so deep and inspiring.
you have shone ppl that there is hope and giving up is not a option because when you think the end is near...your wrong
great job in expressing yourself here.
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This is very nice. There are some grammar things, but besides that it's a really great story and poem. Great write. I love that you built your wall up and that he managed to break it down to see the real you
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i like it. it's really good.
i like how you say, "He is my soldier, my superman and lover" -
The gil who get burned playing with fire. THis reminds me of when I was 6 I started fire ,got burne and my bed was almost on fire.
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Having knowledge of self will bring home a realisation that it doesn't always have to be 'that' way.
Take a stand for you feel could be the change you know you want, but are afraid to jump.
Just do it, find the power he has offered and put it to good use. enjoy it, believe in it, take it. don't waste it.
Good write full of emotion.
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