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Consciousness

I am made of electrons and of dust but it's okay
you don't need to worry.

I'm disintegrating but you are too so we'll just decay together if that's alright with you.

When it's all done, I'd like the dust that used to be me to be near to the dust that used to be you.

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  • Impulse
    March 1

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    wow. love, life and mortality all covered in 3 lines, with splendid serenity. I really, really like this one. perhaps a little punctuation?