Prying voices singing sweet echoes
over a tainted melody
I crescendo in shock
and diminish as I shy away
From such a discovery as mine
who does not recoil from
a tempest of new emotion?
an inferno of limerence
Liquidized
and doled onto
an eager, throbbing,
lust-maroon
flower
Does she know what she carries?
something's new in her eyes
glassed over and glistening,
premature sorrow
But it's too soon for her to go-
my sweet innocent, does she see?
how my eyes mirror her emotion?
I care for her; I am equally indignant
of the lovely burden she's unveiled
Her first
unnamed, but well known
blooming, cascading
love
Author notes
Supposed to be/sound somewhat maternal and confusing. I was kinda going for a mix of lyrical and descriptive here, but it really started out terrible and I don't know if I did such a good job salvaging it.
For the excellent contest creators:
Thanks for the wordbank and awesome pictures, I enjoyed it! Also, I apologize for skewing some of the words with suffixes, let me know if you'd like me to change anything.
1) Glistening
2) Shock
3) Mine
4) Tainted
5) Shy
6) Singing
7) Glass
8) Mirror
9) Eyes
10) Inferno
Picture used from contest: http://farm2.static.flickr.com/1086/1213270932_75154bb19c.jpg
A contest entry
- Word Bank and Picture Prompts by Spock.
900 points, ended March 10, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one; your best prewrite. by August Starlight.
765 points, ended March 21, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
Comments
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wow is all i can really muster after read such an elloquent poem. it just simply amazed me. your vocabualry is GREAT.
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Woww... awesome word bank, and you've done amazing with it. The words don't sound like they were forced to fit in, like far too many word bank prompts do.
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lust-maroon flower...what a beautiful phrase
your poetry is so beautiful! I wish I would write more TT-TT -
It says Anonymized for your username in the online friends panel but I already saw this on the home page, so I know who you are (muhahaha). I really liked it, and I was surprised to see that you had used both the word bank and a picture as your prompt. The poem was very mysterious, and it blossomed wonderfully at the end. The imagery and details were also well done. Great write, and thanks for entering!
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omg this is beautiful!
i especially enjoy the last stanza!!
well done! keep writing!
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*begins to cry* beautiful
i love it. im gonna post it as my favorite quote...
im gonna put it as my status.
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