one moment silence
the sudden bang of a gun
fallen to heaven
Author notes
I have just watched a programe called waterloo road and wrote this from my perception of the sad ending
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This is a beautiful poem
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Few words and yet it stays all that need to be said to allow the reader to know the scene, take it in and feel the impact. IT's a goody
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reminds of the Abba song though not as sad. Awesome!
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Sis,
What a wonderful story told in so few words...sad and strong in brevity.
Love the closing line.
Best,
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Superb
'tis a fine write, I'm sure you can realize which actual military battle this reminded me of. (lol) Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
I watch this show, and it is gripping. You have managed to catch all the drama from the episode when that schoolkid shot the gun and a girl slipped away. So few words, yet so powerful an image you leave. Well done.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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Superb
Reminds me of Napoleon and the Battle of Waterloo. Very well written, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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Wonderful last line!
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Oh my gosh... this was so subtly tragic. I loved this and I have never watched what you mentioned in the author notes, but I'll have to check it out. Although I don't know if I can watch something that's going to probably break my heart!!
I liked this one.
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Brilliant, Poet!!
I haven't heard of Waterloo road, but if I have a chance I'll check it out. Wishing you all the best!! Peace, xx Cyn 
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excellent~
Great poem here sis
Best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Susan~~~
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awww great write... I havent watched waterloo road in ages, god knows how much I've missed damn it, I loved it and never got the time to watch.
other than that ickle rant Great poem and I can sense your sadness in it xx
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Wow I liked this.
I must say Waterloo Road is a great program.
This was really good in just a few words. You made it tense and a good read. Keep writing.
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Oh, wow. I really like the way you can write these short pieces and make me feel so much. Gee! This was great. I could imagine the sound of the gun...and the last line made me cry. Well done. I'll be sure to steer clear of this program. Again, well done.
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wow what emotion captured in so few words, well done and good luck
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I never heard of this but your poem makes me feel as if I have. Great imagery dear. Thank you for sharing with me.
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I saw it last night
My daughter watches it !!!
I think your poem said it all
great hun
Best wishes Julie x
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excellent~
This poem speaks volumes.....
So much said in such few words
Best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Nice.
I haven't heard of that show.
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Wonderful
Short, but so well done. Thank you for sharing.
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awwwww
this is powerful, great write, and dont cry
Stephanie ♥
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