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Found in December

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Last winter we played hide and seek
in between the trees
and covered ourselves in December.
We’d only just met, but I knew you.

I knew you, like I knew
the trees wouldn’t always be bare
and how the brilliance of the snow
would be replaced by the sun’s warmth.


I held my breath
behind the strongest timber
and hoped you’d not
hear the thudding in my chest.
But you knew me.

You knew me, like you knew
the seasons are forever changing,
and you knew me, like you knew
you’d be counting
when ever I wanted to play
and you’d be searching
should I ever need to be found.

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I was found in December by my wonderful fiance.This is for him.

When were you found?


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  • Brilliant!

    Hi

    I've read a few of your works and this one stands out for its magnetic charm. I absolutely adore the presentation and believe it to enhance the poem. Best of luck in your future writes.

    The Rivaling Mimic

  • I am in love with your work.

    This is unbelievable.

    I can't even begin to go into all the mechanics of what is real and emotional in your writing.

    It's so blunt, and bare, and yet metaphoric and ornamented.

    It's this collage of simultaneous statements of beauty, and statements of fact.

    I love it.


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 1

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    Nice poem. Excellent picture. This piece was sweet, and the phrasing and word choice were impeccable. I did think the text was a little small for someone who stares at a computer screen all day. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


    • silverscent gold member
      April 1
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      Thanks for the comment. I think the text size can vary depending on what browser you use, for instance, on mine it's quite large. Sorry for straining your eyes


  • Poetic Rage
    March 28

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    When the time comes and you know something before hand and your know it is right no matter what. The is passion that flows and moves you can feel it with each and every word. There must bea story behind this I feel it has I read it. December the month most see as a winter month with snow and snowball fights.


    Great Write!!


  • turpentine
    March 23

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    'I knew you, like I knew
    the trees wouldn’t always be bare
    and how the brilliance of the snow
    would be replaced by the sun’s warmth'

    I love that stanza! I love this poem!

  • jadeangyal
    March 23

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    I knew you, like I knew
    the trees wouldn’t always be bare
    This is so beautiful! And I would quote the entire last stanza, too, because it is breathtaking. The last four lines are line a good book. Beautifully done.

  • A beautiful write. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering

    ~Lae

  • RoshniD
    March 20

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    Even the word "beautiful" doesn't quite do this poem justice! Love the emotions that this poem evokes. Thanks!

  • This is one of the most brilliant and touching pieces I've ever read. Well done.


  • sense surreal gold member
    March 13

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    such a beautiful knowing esp it is a mutual one. I love the ending...and the overall mood of the poem


  • Lolitax3
    March 12
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    I enjoyed the smoothness of the transitions between the focus as well as the stanzas.


  • Mrs D
    March 12

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    BRILLIANT....

    THIS IS ANN AMAZINGLY BEAUTIFUL POEM.......YOU ARE WORTH BRING IN THE SPOT LIGHT ....

    I LOVE THE FLOW ...AND THE PURENESS

    "and covered ourselves in December."GREAT AND UNIQUE METAPHOR.....

    THERE'S NOT EVEN MUCH I CAN SAY ..EXCEPT KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!


  • A. Rose
    March 12
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    This was sooo great! So beautiful.


  • ToxicBunny
    March 12
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    awesome

    i diiig it, you're my hero


  • couldbeworse
    March 12
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    very well done. flowed like butta ! i was found in february

  • Lovely!

    Such as beautiful poem, lovely rhythm to it and a very sweet sentiment...oh and it was October for me - see 'Life Begins'. Thanks!


  • nilav
    March 11
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    beautiful...enjoyed it

  • I really love this. The last part was my favorite.


  • alpPDCjr12
    March 11
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    beautiful


  • WhatAboutLove
    March 11
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    this piece is really good. it flows very nicely.

  • Wow...this is a very good piece...It flows very nicely indeed!


  • CarribuChan
    March 11

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    This is amazing. Pretty much spectacular. I love the use of hide and seek


  • Vertigo-
    March 11
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    wow amazing write =]

  • Topnotchsy
    March 6

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    Wow, this is great. I had forgotten what I was missing. The imagery here is absolutely awesome in this poem!! Best of luck in the contest. If I was the judge it would have a tough time being beat.

  • SuicideTree
    February 27

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    I love this: "Last winter we played hide and seek
    in between the trees
    and covered ourselves in December." Very good read, thank you.


  • laurel
    February 27
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    spectacular.

    i loved this, especially your metaphor using hide-and-seek.
    wonderful write, thank you =)


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    February 27

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    I passed over this poem so many times until finally clicking on it today.
    AM I GLAD I DID! It is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read.Everything about it fits including the picture.I was found in 1974 unfortunately after several years of marriage and three kids he got found. I didn't know however that someone else was counting. I got found again
    and did find. Have been that way for the past 15 years..
    You have an absolute winner in this poem. Again I'm so glad I found it. I'm all out of smileys otherwise I'd give them all to you.


  • Jocelyn.Jaded
    February 27
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    Oh wow, I really liked this, its beautiful. :] The picture really matchs the poem too. Great write.


  • PhadraigMcShane
    February 27
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    My game of hide and seek goes on and on, something i am glad for.

    Good write.


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    February 26

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    My wellspring of love lost, unrequited and such ran out in Jan. of this year. I had spent four years in the wilderness of self imposed alone and was found during "movie night" at a friends.
    This brought all of that recent history right back to now. I'm going to have my GF read this. I'm sure it will get a "That is so us"
    Excellent write


  • Azgar
    February 25

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    there's something to it. I liked the picture it brought to my mind


  • Midnite-Rae
    February 25

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    I was found and I did find in a December. December of 2007. What a sweet poem. It sounds so sweet and "innocent" almost to me. You did a wonderful job. Keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

  • cdudecosner
    February 25
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    That really is a beautiful poem... Wonderful imagery and beautiful feelings.


  • Icarus
    February 25

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    Beautiful metaphor used. I love how you wrote this. Simple words, deep meaning. It's left me with an enchanted feeling. I hope your fairy tale is bliss x


  • Jacob S. Steadman
    February 25

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    3Xfound

    I've been found three times in thirty three years. What a lot of threes ey, it must be symbolic or something.


  • xitsthechokinkindx
    February 25

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    this is incredible! amazing emotion in your poetry and very original..like it


  • silvie
    February 25
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    wow

    this is really good!!

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