Her façade breaks as
she glances in the mirror,
glaring at the poisonous
ruptures that plague
her whole beauty
The bruises swell and remain,
a memoir of the effects
from the one she thought
she truly loved
her minds eye fades,
hot tears running down her face
as fast as the shower’s droplets
that burn deep into her soul
dark infectious thoughts
surround her mind as
she remains in her realm
of lost hope and dreams
[She needs an escape]
In a list
A contest entry
- ROUND 1 ( Auditions ) by HereComesTheSun.
400 points, ended March 14, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You never know.... by Cyanide Dreams.
1640 points, ended May 12, 77 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me if there are any grammar/spelling mistakes?
Comments
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Congrats on the gold my friend keep up the amazing work.
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Thank you
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98
Title: 10/10
Originality: 10/10
Emotion: 10/10
Grammar/Spelling: 10/10
Flow/Structure: 9/10
Imagery: 10/10
Overall Use of Poetic Devices: 10/10
Reaction: 9/10
Rules: 10/10
Overall: 10/10
Totaling: 98/100
Wow, this was really good. Your imagery was superb and your use of poetic devices was great. You did the prompt justice. I really liked where this went. It had great emotion in it and was really just, in your face, in a good way. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Josh -
beautiful job with the prompt you also did a very good job overall with writing something unique that catches the readers eye. great work and thank you for entering
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