We are b/r/o/k/e/n
The fighting, the crying- we’re past all that
Our love may have faded but our desire burns hot
Lust
For
Me
The touch of your hand is enough to bring me straight into your bed
(A bed where so many others have been)
Your chapped lips tight against mine, forcing my eyes to close in “what could have been” thoughts
Tongue in my mouth, stopping the bitter words from coming out
Wanting to whisper
“Stop it, I don’t love you anymore”
Left breathless from regret
You say you will never feel the same, but that bulge in your jeans says differently
Use
Me
Take advantage of my frail state of mind, because I know when I leave you wont speak a single word to me
Its disgusting how you can promise you’ll change time and time again
Somewhere along the line I became un-important to you
Now the hope for our relationship is lost somewhere between video games and your mothers bitching
Take away sex and there’s nothing left
Its
Over
Author notes
christina -x-
A contest entry
- All that's left are these pretty words. by Candy Morphine.
400 points, ended April 14, 2009, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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damn girl...
I know the feeling and it sucks. But at the same time its almost impossible to break away even though you know they dont care. Well done this was an amazing piece!
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Wow, you have a gift for writing. I can relate to a lot of things in this, with my past of sour relationships.
Its disgusting how you can promise you’ll change time and time again
Especially that line, and video games. [People and their damn video games.] haha.
Very good darling. Clappys for you.
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awww i do? lol thanks im so blushing. ya im sure alot of ppl can relate....guys suck and yea I HATE THEIR VIDEO GAMES lol thanks a ton 4 ur comment
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this was amazing...i connected with this poem so well...i loved it
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thanks im glad u liked it.
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I love this... You have no idea and I can't possibly begin to explain.
I so wish I could write a piece like this!
Great write!
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really aww thanks babe
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Wow i like this. This was a great poem truly, power and raw with emotion. Whether real or not the emotions were conveyed very well. Keep writing!
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thanks
im glad u liked it...and yes its real lol i was a lucky one to get a prompt that fit into my life....thanks again
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I really like the way this starts. The first line is good, then the next few take a slightly different tone. Excellent.
You say you will never feel the same, but that bulge in your jeans says differently
-Aah i love that bit. Very tongue-in-cheek.
i also really like the repetition throughtout the poem of breaking down2/3 words and putting spaces between them.
I really liked this.
Finalist!
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thank you babe, lol thts prolly my fav part too. wow finalist really thankssss
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Lyric:
"your hands on me, pressing hard against your jeans, tongue in my mouth, trying to stop the words from coming out"
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