This way wounded
I’ll always be
just as cut from a tree
my sweetest sap
runs free
thick and pure
so I'll always believe
in the things yet to come
not broken things that were
so that the very best I have
might be cast and forged
so that I might solder my words
as smoldering proof
in poetry
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Oh, you do it exquisitely. The solder smolders, but the words flame and cool in the recesses of mind and soul.
Sweet sap, tapped, consumed and digested slowly in your lines. ~K
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It's Spring, ..... saps gotta run !
as always you're too kind.
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Very Different
I like the flow of this particular work very nice. I love how when you read an artistic work so many things can be sparked by one simple word when I read “ So I might solder my words.” a solder bridge came to mind then a cold solder joint funny how we interlace ourselves with in the face of others work. I like this poem very much how it makes you think of many different things my heartfelt thank you for this most lovely post.
Lady E
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"so that I might solder my words"
excellent...i love the idea of 'soldering' words together & into a poem, that is such an interesting metaphor....this poem in particular has a very smooth unison of words...love it..
although, it makes me think of wood, and not metal...quietly burning. 
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i agree there is a little wandering in the thought process up there. perhaps in time i can smooth or rationalize that out a bit.
thnx for your kindness -
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lol...it's not a bad thing, though..i think this works..
and thx for reading my poetry
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this is just beautiful, the flow is wonderful and rings with a deep integrity. I love also the outlook it demonstrates, of looking to the future and not dwelling on past difficulty but rather using these things as nutrients for your poetry. also i am in love with the last five lines.
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yes, this was definately a "feel good one" to write. you're too good to me .. lol
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hmm, nice write, great word flow
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that's my "thing" ... word flow.
thnx
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