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Fairytale

This aint a fairytale
i'm not special enough
for you to care about me.

I'm sorry that you feel that way
but now it's to late for you
to come and be the hero.

I'm obviously not a princess
and I'm sure as hell not
going to let you come back
and try to pick up the pieces
of my broken heart.

I used to be a dreamer
but you went and messed
that up too.

So i just want to tell
you, that you can't
come pick up the pieces
because I'll get over you at my own pace.

Author notes

This poem was inspired by White Horse-Taylor Swift.

option 30.

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  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    April 20

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    i thought i recognized this title i have commented it before its still a really good poem. thanks for entering and good luck


  • Nam
    April 14

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    "This aint a fairytale" -- "aint" would be "ain't".

    "but now it's to late for you" -- "to" would be "too".

    Other than those two things: a nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • Flowergirl
    March 28

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    very nice i love it and if that person cant see that they were so important it is there loss nice work keep it up...


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 22
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    great emotion good write


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 16

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    A heartfelt write with emotions galore. Great job! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • August Starlight silver member
    March 15
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    This poem would probably mean more if I knew the song. But I did enjoy it and I definitely could relate to it. I love the whole fairytale theme.
    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    If you really want constructive criticism, here it is: Be consistent with your grammar. I see both capitalized and lowercase i's. But that's really all I can offer as far as constructive criticism.


  • Dearly Beloved...
    March 2
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    Yuo are so right , life isnt a fairy tale, My knight in shinning armor, was a loser in aluminum


  • poet360
    March 2
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    good job! i really liked how you conveyed the emotions here.
    =)
    good luck in the contest.


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    February 27
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    each one of us is special, only most of us get lost in the crowd
    sweet


  • Vampirette1901
    February 27
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    i like it

    i like it. i could see me yellin at someone sayin that.. lol really good. keep up writtin

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    February 26
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    awesome!!!! i loved it! the vivid images in this piece are spectacular and i enjoyed reading this piece. way to go!!!! keep up the good work and thanks for entering my contest!

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    February 25
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    awesomeness!! i thought that this was really good. i can relate to this alot, and you know that . lol hehe. anyways, a really good poem! i loved how it all flowed, and i could feel the emotions in this piece as i read it. everything jumped out at me. I absolutely loved the imagery in this piece; like a vivid painting in your mind. keep up the good work devil!


  • Calvin-Hobbes
    February 25

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    Good!

    I honestly don't know what...I'm not a dark person, therefore I dont particulary like dark poetry, but yes, is does fit White Horse.
    Your friend
    Foofy!

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