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12pm and dressed to kill

 

 

10am

 

I awake to the sounds of morning. My innocent eyes look like I have just breakfast and good intentions planned, but looks can hide the most secret of sin. I have been planning this for months now. He thought he had the last word, well, think again.

 

 

12:30pm

 

Lunch tastes better than it ever did. Deep thoughts and careful planning cloud my judgement, that's why today exists - because I'm going to have my say. They always say "hell hath no fury like the wrath of a woman scorned", well honey, they haven't seen my chaos erupt. Just wait...

 

 

4:50pm

 

The hours are just a constant "tick, tock" in my mind. It's like insanity is about to set in. Maybe it has already. My hourglass figure and Oxford-like intellect make for a heck of a poison, or so it seems. I've been known to break a few, and maybe I don't just mean hearts.

 

 

8:30pm

 

The deep beats inside, my precussion-like beats from cadiac movement. A broken heart gets its sewing needle and stitches tonight. He ruined my fairy tale by sealing the deal with that tramp. That's okay. He'll never forget this face.

 

 

11:30pm

 

Last minute preperation. I look so vile. I even disgust myself by the way I look. But hey, it's for one night, thank God. See, guys like him are the reason real women like us end up single are whole lives. So, he thinks he can play the "anti-Cupid", huh? We'll see...

 

 

12pm

 

Hey! Yeah, it's me again. Didn't think you'd ever see me again, did you. After the broken windows of my four chambers that my love called home was shattered, and I was left to pick up the pieces alone, I figured it was time to get what's mine.

 

So that's why....what? Wait....put that away. Please, stop pointing that at me. Okay, I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I should have been more respectful. Just, please.

 

Stop. No!

 

No!

 

I said I was...

 

Author notes

Author Page: http://allpoetry.com/Lowercase%20Prelude

Prompt: 12pm and dressed to kill

AP Name: l o w e r c a s e p r e l u d e

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Comments

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 19, 2009

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    Wonderfully wrote. Love the end and the planning at the start. Left us thinking and wondering. You always write well.


  • trekkergirl
    April 5, 2009

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    I like this. I like the way you wrote it. I like the way you gave it a sort of schedule. I think you did th is very well. Very creative. I liked it a lot.


  • Comatose--X silver member
    April 1, 2009

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    i love this poem.!!

    thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.

    Favorite lines:

    "Last minute preperation. I look so vile. I even disgust myself by the way I look. But hey, it's for one night, thank God. See, guys like him are the reason real women like us end up single are whole lives. So, he thinks he can play the "anti-Cupid", huh? We'll see..."


  • Umi Juvariel
    March 30, 2009

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    This was interesting. I liked the prelude, and the ending really came as a surprise. Surprising poems are my favorite. I like the internal rhymes you have going. Excellent work and good luck in my contest.


  • Comatose--X silver member
    March 28, 2009
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    • if you would please space your name out in your AN like this : X x D r o w n . M e . D r y X x . Just out a space between each of your letters. Please. If you chose not to thats fine but i would like you you give me a reason.


  • Blackbird Writer
    February 28, 2009
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    The end is disconcerting, it makes you wonder what happened to her...


  • just weak hands
    February 28, 2009

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    'They always say "hell hath no fury like the wrath of a woman scorned", well honey, they haven't seen my chaos erupt. Just wait...'

    This is only one of the numerous amazing lines that created this incredible write. I'm speechless. No words can express my adoration for this ! I feel inferior to your skill ! Ahaha I also love the style that you chose. This is the first time I've seen this one, besides the 'i, ii, iii' one. Glad to find another unique one...

    Not much to say besides that. It's amazing. Loved it


  • XXxXBassMeisterxXxX
    February 28, 2009

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    oh my gosh. this was fucking amazing. just frucking amazing. it was just amazing. that is all i really can say. sorry i haven't been on in awhile. i have been locked up but this is amazing. really truly amazing.


  • cgirl0410
    February 27, 2009

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    Love the scripted style of this piece. THAT TITLE IS AMAZING!!!!!!!! It made me want to click on this poem and see what it was. LOL. Great piece. - cgirl0410


  • DaValleyGirl
    February 26, 2009
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    It was WONDERFUL!!

    It makes you feel like your there watching this happen.


  • Number 13
    February 25, 2009

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    This is amazing, as always! ♥

    I really love the way it's set up, almost feels as if I'm in someone else's shoes, in a way.



    but..

    I think under 10am, innocence, should be innocent?

    and under 12pm, you're missing a "e" in shattered :]



  • Candy Morphine
    February 25, 2009

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    My innocence eyes look like I have just breakfast and good intentions planned
    -gosh, trust you to make such a plain phrase into pure interest.

    They always say "hell hath no fury like the wrath of a woman scorned", well honey, they haven't seen my chaos erupt. Just wait...
    -aahhh Loveeee it!!!

    I've been known to break a few, and maybe I don't just mean hearts
    -Haha, this is great!

    the last line is a fabulous way to finish.

    Ooh, this poem is quite different to what i expect and took an unexpected turn at the end. gosh i just love your writing

    Finalist [of course]


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      February 25, 2009
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      Thank you for your comment.

      I am glad you like it. I thought I would take a unique direction with this piece, make it something unexpected, I suppose


      • Candy Morphine
        February 25, 2009
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        It was a daring move to pull; as not many writers can. But you did! it's really nice to read a fresh poem with a hint of mystery. Great twist.

  • Candy Morphine
    February 25, 2009
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    Ooh; now i see who it is. dont you have enough trophies? Lol=p


  • Candy Morphine
    February 25, 2009
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    Okie doke. Just remember you authors page link. You were quick to enter=P

    Picture:
    http://lostknightkg.deviantart.com/art/Rain-shadows-114023412
    ..Or..
    http://muchlikefalling.deviantart.com/art/Untouched-114050835

    (i personally like the last the best, but totally up to you=])



    Title:
    Jealous eyes look like your mirror.


    Okay well, I hope you like=]

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