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returning to reality.

My puzzled face, awfully confused
this reflection somethings missing
you've broke me down to mere ashes
my soul its been disappearing

if i keep trying for only you
I will completely disappearing
my smile already began its processor
its forgot its purpose , its fading away


thats when i met him  
things started to change
life's reason became clear
my young voice people finally could hear

 

my life black and white

colored in with colorful shades

promise to stay

not leave like the dreadfull tears

 

ive come back to reality 

I have someone now

i'm glad that i moved on

truth is boy ,your no longer mine

 

Author notes

uhuh ,
i really hate this .
i feeel stupid whats a pw D:

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  • beereader
    March 7
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    interesting

    i love how you descirbe the ashes and then talk about the colors


  • xeroabyss II
    March 7

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    What's to hate about this.
    This is exactly like how I felt once in my life, and the poem actually reminded me of how it sort of felt good for a minute.


  • Still Standing gold member
    February 24

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    It's good

    A PW is a pre-write or a poem you have already written that fits the theme of the contest, don't feel stupid it took me a minute to feel my way around the site! Welcome by the way! this write is good it just needs some fine tuning. You can do a spell check, check your grammer, and correct your punctuation. But the imagery is actually very good.

    my life black and white

    colored in with colorful shades

    promise to stay ,

    not leave like the dreadfull tears

    I love the theme of the ashes and how you continued with it here...Thanks for entering, correct some things, and good luck!