The eyeliner slides off my face,
as I bury my broken heart into soapsuds
& drilling waters.
checkered curtains, cover the world
from this empty girl - remembering;
lies he spat, rebound off uncaring walls.
She swears she sees his silhouette,
like many times before at the doorway
humming her favourite song.
Her heart, once Maroon, now charcoal crimson,
so blackened, broken and hard - when she is alone,
she has to acknowledge everything he ever done.
In the dark bathroom, with her shampoo secrets
& lone tears, she is safe from harm.
Author notes
Probably shouldn't enter, as in sooo many rounds but... TEMPTED SO BAD. So I am gonna xd. I got inspired by all.
Prompt 1... Picture 1.
Prompt 2...acknowledge, rebound, silhoutte, charcol, maroon
Prompt 3... Title one, obviously.
Prompt 4... The last one XD.
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A contest entry
- ROUND 1 ( Auditions ) by HereComesTheSun.
400 points, ended March 14, 2009, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everything and All Things! by Darkmoon.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "nothing takes the taste out of peanut butter quite like unrequited love" by katie-jo.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is so sad, and I can relate to the part where you hide your sadness in the shower, although not the exact reason behind it. Wow that sentence made a lot more sense in my head...lol.
Thanks for the great entry and all the best in the contest!
Blessings,
Katie -
Thank you for your entry. I relate to it alot.
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i thought this was very well put keep up the good work
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Great depth to this,
how the imagery brings out the emotions
Great work here -
Fantastic poem, great imagery and concentrated use of pain. Really good to read.
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very nice i love it keep up the great work.
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first of all KUDUOS wow you used all the prompts this is just wow dang. you really did an awesome job with this piece "the lies he spat,
rebound off uncaring walls." such an awesome line
thanks for entering -
I feel like I'm there. Great write Xds-gX
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so wonderfully written. you really know how to paint a picture.
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nice! i love how you incorporated all of the prompts into one poem.
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