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Pushing Through The Pain (One More Chance)

You can see
The tears that haven't
Fallen from my eyes.

You can see those eyes are
Full of pain...
Misery...
I am a broken heart.

But I remember
What it felt like to be
Loved.

A wonderful word,
A wonderful feeling.

I now stand,
holding myself,
peeling away the shell
I've forced upon myself.

And I look up into your precious eyes
And ask, "Will you teach me what this is? Somehow I've forgotten..."
You place my chin into you hands and nod slowly...

Giving me one kiss,
One more chance.

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Honestly, I'm not that great with imagery, but I like it...Not really...

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  • dillon79
    March 4
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    good


  • Still Standing gold member
    February 24

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    Good Work

    Hey I'll say this, you did enough for me and this contest. This line actually brought a tear to my eye:

    And I look up into your precious eyes
    And ask, "Will you teach me what this is? Somehow I've forgotten..."
    You place my chin into you hands and nod slowly...

    Then the ending gave me chills..one more chance..yes we all deserve it! Ilove the image of you peeling away all the hurt and the pain from lost loves....Thanks for entering and good luck