He is a comma-splice; erroneous and imperfect, a purple thread woven into a tapestry of turquoise. His pronoun-reference is inconsistent with the subject, but his blood fits that razorblade like a slippery, scarlet glove.
Her silver teeth glint against the angry pineapple sky, a jigsaw with a missing piece longing for completeness, as he does. Glass veins twitch like dynamite as steel embraces scar-tissue, a sacred union between lovers; second and third mouths gasp their vows in unison, as his blushing razor-bride leans in for the anticipated kiss without a father's blessing.
Author notes
prompt: something in your pocket no one else knows about.
well, not my pocket per se, but whatev.
based on le novel 
guess what the something is, and i'll give you a cookie.
In a list
Fluff is great, but it really doesn't help; honesty is the best policy.
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oOoO its so obscure! obscurity is good i hope weddings are not that brutal.
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i don't know. lol. i'm against marriage, so i probably never will either
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that first sentence is gold
studded with rhinestones and diamonds... you get the drift (:
love it
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that be some bloody wedding lol but there is love leaning in on that kiss. I feel it
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I really love this, definitely what the prompt was asking for, not a piece like mine. Haha, not vomit worth.
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WOW pineapple sky!
Was that something a desecrated communion wafer? Please say yes. -
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of course it was, silly just kidding.
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This wasn't puke worthy at all, shut up. Actually, the first paragraph brought me close to tears, it reminds me so much of someone. So very emotive, which is exactly what prose is supposed to be. The only slight problem I have with it, is in some places it's a little wordy. Don't want anyone getting lost in so many metaphors they don't understand the beautiful complexity of your piece. Only complaint. Nicely wrote!
Read mine, now THATS scary lol.
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