Keep 'em coming charlie ole boy!
My life's a freakin mess man, Hiccup, hiccup! sorry
Charlie, it's pretty late, everyone seems
to have left the building. well yeah.
Can I ask you something man? sure.
Would it be okay if I shared my pain with you tonight?
I guess, I mean what's up?
Well man, i've given this woman so many years
of my life, yet she's given me nothing in return.
I was there for her through thick and thin but she acts
like none of it even matters.
Really! yeah man, hiccup! hiccup sorry
could you pour me another drink man? sure.
Thanks buddy. no problem.
Anyway charlie old buddy, this bitch, excuse me,
I didn't mean to call her a bitch but it hurts man.
you know what I mean?
Well, sure! yeah I do.
It must me extremely painful.
Tell me about it old boy.
I'm dying inside man, I feel so freakin lost.
you give yourself totally to someone
who claims to love you only to be betrayed.
I could imagine.
yeah man, it's fucked up dude.
Listen, is it george?
yeah charlie thats right.
Well I feel for you, truly I do.
Believe me man, life's a real bitch,
but you need to let it go friend.
what do you mean?
Sounds like she hurt you really bad.
by the way whats her name?
Her name is Cynthia man.
Alright, you need to move on and let Cynthia go.
Life's too short to live in the past.
I know charlie, you're so right but its so fucking hard.
Don't allow her to rule your life man.
Take what you've learned and cut your losses man.
Listen I got to clean up now.
Okay charlie, I understand, hiccup!
are you going to be okay george?
yeah I'm going to catch a cab home.
Good george, I'll see you around.
Keep your head up and feel free to talk to me anytime.
for real dude?
yeah man, everyone needs a friend.
that's so freakin cool dude.
Later charlie.
Goodnight george.
night charlie.
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Comments
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Wow, man...you almost had me crying...hope this is imaginary...great story write...
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HHMM Interesting dear. Quite the conversation.
But you need to let it go friend would be the right line!!
Have a great day sweet friend.
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Thanks, a most interesting conversation here
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I like the conversing style of this piece. It paints a story of pain. It is humorous in places and honest and sad in others. Good luck in the contest. - cgirl0410
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HI my friend, I haven't been on here much lately and haven't read you in a while. You set the scene perfectly, I felt like I was sitting at the bar, listening to poor George's broken heart.
Hope all is well, good luck in this contest.
blessings,
Michelle
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nice!
i love it! the hiccups are the best lol, i could see it happening as you spoke, love it! thanks for sharing this one too!
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