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The Traveller

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A white Thai elephant splashed with water
turns a dusty grey

The shutters of nine hundred shops

flapping open in Cairo’s souks

In Calcutta (he) thinks he’s a sacred cow –
crossing the road in front of cars and learning to low

On the Champs Elysse (he) sits in his garret
and tracks finches across balcony railings
and leaps off,  thinking he can fly

Then, with guilt-clouds gathering
he runs off to hide behind
the metaphorical robes of some
long-dead hippy wordsmith
(albeit a kind one)

Navigating the pink stone cathedrals of Mexico
he remembers how her hand
is warm and small and slightly rough in his
and he knows all it’s knobs and textures

He can smell her now
clean, like rain

“Do I know you?” he asks
“Maybe” she answers
and that is when
he felt her throat vibrate against his lips
humming through his body
before he realized
              they were her words…

























The Traveller
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Author notes

“The stars, that nature hung in heaven, and filled their lamps with everlasting oil, give due light to the misled and lonely traveller.” ~ John Milton

image at: www.sawse.com

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  • silverscent gold member
    March 8, 2009

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    This is brilliant. The variation of images you've conveyed through out was refreshing. I asked for simple life in general and this fits exactly, but you've done it in a way which sets you apart from most of the other entrants.
    Thanks for entering.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    February 26, 2009

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    Do I know you?” he asks
    “Maybe” she answers
    and that is when
    he felt her throat vibrate against his lips
    humming through his body
    before he realized
    they were her words…

    Perfect. What a great resolve to the poem. What great imagery. This is just excellent.

    Of course, wherever we go, there we are.

    Garrison


  • Balldinger silver member
    February 25, 2009

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    what Visa...?

    with an introduction like this, who needs to travel any further? there's a heady scent at the corner of Egypt and France, just waiting to mezmerize the backside off a panel jockey in a felted green suit with her words that can never be found in a jungle-sized pocket dictionary. what apocolypse can anyone possibly be talking about now?


  • Rowan gold member
    February 25, 2009

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    I just read Lutes, and this sounds like a prelude to that one. Don't know if it is or isn't, but I love this one.
    "the metaphorical robes of some
    long-dead hippy wordsmith
    (albeit a kind one)"
    I loved that line.


  • lunarlunacy
    February 24, 2009

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    Damn gal, you just amaze me. What a journey you weave evoking such a myriad of emotions along the way. Best of luck in the contest, that's got gold all over it.

    and where are you perpetually finding all those groovy pics?

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