If I can do it, you can too
I moved on and so can you
Procrastination pulled me deep down
swimming in memories
I almost drowned
So many times I let it win
gave in to it
though the prospect grim
It ate away from inside out
blurring what I was about
Making grey all I could see
and bringing down
those close to me
My senses numbed
my body weak
I gave up living
no strength to speak
But something clicked
inside one day
Clouds did part
sun drowned the grey
I saw the good
that was always there
how my life had fun
and love and care
I clenched my fist
and held on tight
to ev'ry positive
ev'ry beautiful sight
forced myself to go outside
started to live
no longer hide
I took another step each day
still taking help along the way
until i found my own two feet
the repair job was soon complete
Don't let it hold you down too long
don't let it silence your inner song
don't give up on all that's you
your rebirth is overdue
Author notes
This is my first poem in a very long time. I wrote what came naturally to me and therefore the punctuation and rhythm needs work. please feel free to make suggestions/notes on that.
Thanks
Please tell me what you think
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I know how what you mean and I know where this comes from but as you can clearly tell from this piece you are a fighter and a survivor. You have been through so much these last few years I know that this piece comes from deep within your heart. Its a long, hard road but you have friends who love you, including me. A great write, well done sis xxx
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Thanks so much sis! Lovely comment. It is such comments that keep me on the positive path I speak of.
Luv ya
SarahD
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I'm not sure that the distance between you and your last write has any relevance? When one writes they write for themselves and for those who might read their work. It would seems to me that this work has so much hope in it that anyone who would take the time to visit it would find 'life'. Very well done, poet. I have no happy clappy men left or you would get them in trione. I found I comment on pieces and then lose points, they need to change that. RC
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Thanks so much for your lovely comment on this poem. I hope to inspire others with 'life'. As I have said before, it is comments such as these that keep me on the positive track i talk about.
SarahD
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this is really well written. the last four lines being my favorite.
this is really something everyone can compare to which makes it even better.
very good. (:
- erin.
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Thanks for your response to my poem. Glad you liked it. SarahD
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very natural and story wise
brilliant write
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Thanks for a lovely comment on my poem. Much appreciated!
SarahD
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Reality ...This is what happened last year.....and I decided last christmas...that its enough....Today am a content person...... A nice wrie.
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Thanks so much for your comment, really pleased that your day came and you are now content! Hold on!
SarahD
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Don't let it hold you down too long
don't let it silence your inner song
suffering from ptsd, this is often difficult to remember. thank you for sharing this with me today, i needed the reminder. viyanna rosemarie
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I am sorry to hear that you are suffering with ptsd! I am glad if this poem can offer you some reminder of the things that help us to carry on. Be strong and hold on to the good x
SarahD
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I don't know much about poetry except that it's the deepest form of expression. This comment might therefore not be constructive. I identify alot with this piece, and especialy the last four lines. Thumbs up.
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I am not only after constructive comments on my poem and I thank you for being honest. Glad you liked my poem and I appreciate you took the time to read my poem x
SarahD
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