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Mr.Grandfather Clock

He's  been sitting for quite long at his place
he's got those two hands,& a grumpy face
one hand short and one hand long
he ticks and tocks,that's his song

His shining glass is unbreakable and stiff
his little stubby nose gets quite a whiff
of all those cobwebs that surround his place
oh my! oh my ! ,what an utter disgrace

No one respects his fatherly presence
no one is there to offer his defense
he just spends time under his brown cloak
that one which is made out of oak

He met not a soul  in all these years
so it came out of shock,when without any fear
a child came and rewound his time
my,it felt good,he felt young and alive

There was something about the child
he had a twinkle in his deep blue eyes
He stood watching his elder's demeanor
he stood respecting his long living senior

Mr.Grandfather clock liked the little child
although he may have seemed a little shy
perhaps the child was lost and came to him
seeking something he didn't find within

a whole wave of deluge swept the old clock
and being so emotional came as a shock
he stood there pondering what had become
he had closed his front door on a tender, little thumb

For so long the coat of the clock was tainted
he felt he had been polished,and freshly painted
he felt so good that the child had met his eye
so now he sits waiting for another to come by















Author notes

Word Bank:
glistening
shock
lost
deluge
twinkle
glass
eyes
clock
tainted
shy

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 30

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    Wow, amazing descriptions,
    imagery and depth expressed.

    A most wonderful write.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Desdmona
    March 27
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    This is good. I like the idea of time and the use of the words. At parts, though, the rhyming seemed forced and didn't flow as well as I would have liked. It's very visual and well done, just some parts are awkward when you're reading it. Good job and good luck! ~Des


  • madmom68
    February 25
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    You painted a very clear picture. It's a sweet poem.


  • Supa Fox
    February 24

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    I love this! The rhyming was great and the poem was very original. I never expected the word bank words to be used in that way, and it was a very pleasant surprise. I like the story it tells too. Great write and thanks for entering


  • Spock
    February 24

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    Hey,

    Beautiful poem. I loved the rhyming and Imagry. Thanks for entering!

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