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My Only Wish

It's what I see and read about all the time.
It's what I craved to be more than anything.
The life of immortality and the gift of powers.
So swift and quiet like a whisper in the wind.
Heart-stopping beauty and breath-taking desires all mine for the taking.
Your taste changes once you change.
Your senses heighten and your gifts grow extraordinary.
Nothing is the same, everything is amazing.
Except when you hunt.
The scent that once smelled awful now smells mouth-watering.
People would kill to be with you.
Little do they know you would kill to have them.
Their taste in your mouth taste just like candy to a child.
The simplest aroma could trigger your cravings.
The simplest touch could end someone's life or wake them up to a whole new world they never thought existed.

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    September 18
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    Thank you for your wonderful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Not-The-Sun
    August 20

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    wow that's awesome i never read twilight so I don't really know how this fits the contest, haha. "People would kill to be with you.
    Little do they know you would kill to have them.
    Their taste in your mouth taste just like candy to a child.
    The simplest aroma could trigger your cravings."
    are some of the lines I really liked the most
    keep up the good work and congrats on your shiny trophy


  • NarniaKid
    August 17
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    I Like It! Great Job! I think it is very well written!
    Brilliant! Keep Writing!

    -Crystal


  • purplemoon
    August 9

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    I enjoyed this. IT shows peoples longing for immortaliy and such. but I did feel that the ending needed a bit more closure. but All in All wonderful.

    ~Kathyrn
    Thanks for the entry


  • Badass Brea
    July 10
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    I loooooove this!
    I read every vampire book I can get my hands on watch every movie I can, and man-oh-man I would love to be a vampire. It's been my secret little wish for so long now. I find the whole thing completely fascinating & yet sensual.

    Do you watch TrueBlood?


  • Antebellum
    June 24

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    "People would kill to be with you.
    Little do they know you would kill to have them.
    Their taste in your mouth taste just like candy to a child.
    The simplest aroma could trigger your cravings.
    "

    I love these lines. excelent write.


  • Fallen-Thumper
    June 19
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    wow..i love this and i love vampires. this is really great. i loved it


  • sexy emo fairy
    June 12
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    l love vampires. well done. thank you for entering.


  • guardianhost gold member
    May 20
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    Excellent view from the other side - all the best in the contest


  • Classic Cara
    May 14
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    This is really good

    You are really good at writing poems


  • Magik Milk Glass
    May 14
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    wow i love this I can relate well done


  • Symphony
    May 6

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    Ooh, the struggles they go through in their daily lives.

    Favourite part had to be,

    "People would kill to be with you.
    Little do they know you would kill to have them."

    I love the way you turned that upsidedown

    thanks for entering


  • Ez Writer silver member
    May 1

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    An awesome poem , capturing throughout !!
    A pleasure to read thank you !
    Best wishes , Friend Easy
    PS : congratulations on your bronze !!


  • lindaburns gold member
    April 26
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    I have several poems in this general line but on a lighter note. I wish I could think of the name of a couple of them so I could see if you’d read them. “People would kill to be with you. Little do they know you would kill to have them.” HAVE them. If they only knew. Congratulations on the Bronze Trophy.


  • Draig aine gold member
    April 15

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    well penned my friend

    Your taste changes once you change.

    a great observation well put. all in all a most excellent write

  • Cavel Ettienne
    April 7

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    I love this...........your sucked in from start to finish!
    loving the fact it's about twilight even more! good work!!


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    March 27

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    Beautiful and leaves me wanting that immortality. You did an amazing job with this and I love it from the beginning to the end. Great write and thanks for entering!


  • Beauty Of Silence
    March 24
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    OOOH! this is intersting. an amazing vampire poem, so gorgeous! keep writing


  • hazeleyedfreak
    February 26
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    I like it, very vamp.


  • audi009
    February 25
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    wow

    its has a lot of detail, which i enjoy. love it.


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 25
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    This is a beautiful poem, I love it.


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    February 25

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    mystery lies down as each line passes in this piece. beautiful job and a well crafted artful piece of poetry. great work

    -deadly


  • Winged Unicorn
    February 24

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    Beautiful

    This was a beautiful way to describe the world of vampires and how they are seen. Wonderfully written


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 24
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    Wow, loved this piece. Very mysterious and intriguing.


  • L.Jay
    February 24
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    a wonderful vampire poem!

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