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Nocturnal Dancer

I see you through the window,

with me standing by your side.

I look to this image so often,

the precious dream I hold inside

 

Gleaming as light shines through

with the glow of dusk; I pray,

to see my nocturnal dancer,

poised in her bloodstained ballet.

 

I feel like a loathsome worm.

My mind reels from your majesty.

Of all the better men around you,

how could I be worthy of such as thee?

 

You have a million admirers,

and I just can't seem to let it be.

Of all the darker, stronger souls,

do you still dance just for me?

 

I want to kneel and stroke your legs,

begging for just a fleeting taste.

To bite hard into your supple breast,

and dig my nails into your hourglass waist.

 

Do you know how often I imagine,

laying between your sleek thighs?

Whispering your true name to you,

between our sensual, spent sighs

 

I want to touch your heart and soul,

exploring deep groans and quivers.

Then lick your sweet, milky nectar,

dripping languidly from my fingers

 

All of these primitive, bestial lusts,

I think of them and feel so ashamed.

It feels like a sin that such filthy thing

like me should touch your graceful frame.

 

But do you know what I want most of all?

Just to look into your ominous eyes,

and tell you how much I truly love you,

beneath the paling moonlit sky.

 

I want to hear you say it too,

with that voice so soft and sincere.

Look at me and promise that it's true,

and banish all my needless fears.

 

I'm dying to hold you close to me.

It's my fondest, most ardent wish,

to watch you sleep soundly in my arms,

knowing I've won the most precious gift.

 

Would you still walk down the isle with me?

Would you one day be my scarlet bride?

Show me there are good things on earth,

and tell me I no longer need to hide.

 

Will you press your cute, pink lips to my neck?

Will I feel your silky hair against my face?

Will I breathe your intoxicating scent all night,

alone and embracing in our own private place?

 

Will we watch the sun rise together?

Will we kiss in the whispering rain one day?

Will you show me how it feels to be,

in those love stories people always say?

 

I want to see you so much it hurts.

For your attention I want to scream.

If it would please you for a second,

I'd lick your bloody dance floor clean.

 

I'd do anything to worship you.

I beg you please don't disappoint.

If I can't be the one to caress you softly,

I'd rather die beneath your graceful pointes.

Author notes

Lately most poems i see are bogged down with unnecessary amounts of large words and metiphors and just seem to obscure what the poem is really trying to say. With this one i wanted it to be simple and for the imagery and message to speak for itself.

For my beloved soulmate Brie. I know it's been rough on us both lately, and i can often make it hard to put up with me. But i love you more than i have ever known before and i'd wait forever to be with you if i have to.

And i want the whole world to know just how fucking special you are to me. Thank you so much for everything.

The absolutely beautiful (and darkly sexy) picture is from here http://pandora-vampire.deviantart.com/art/100-Themes-17-Blood-56190360

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Comments

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  • Fallen-Phases
    August 19

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    A great write, very well done! I enjoyed your expression and the simple, but very deep way you showed the emotions in this poem! great job


  • Anubis
    March 12

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    What a lovely piece.. You are quite an amazing writer. I am stunned by the expression of your feelings. Such open conveyance.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    February 24

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    This is gorgeous, hun. I've been so worried about you guys, and I'm glad to see that you're both still standing strong after all this. You are the best thing to ever happen to my Brie, and I hope that you two continue to love and cherish each other always.

    Bravo, and best wishes,

    Laura
    aka Immortal Obscurity


  • liltulip gold member
    February 24

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    success!

    you definately say what you want without filling it up with the unnecessary baggage that poems are weighed down with...i love your words, thanks for sharing!


  • Denierim
    February 24

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    You did a marvelous job with this. And you're right too, there are tons of poems out there smothered with methaphors and big words (which I love so I don't notice it often), so it was nice to read something more simple but yet so deep. I really love the story you painted here and the very deep emotions going all the way through this write. It really shows the emotions well, and they're the most important thing when it comes to poetry. Amazing work.


  • Charlotte Whispers
    February 24

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    This is indeed a very beautiful piece and you did make it visual without having to use metaphors or bajillion-letter words. And I do love how you wrote this and made the more 'adult' parts of this piece sensual without being sleazy, which can be quite the fine line to toe. And I have to say that my most favorite part of the poem were these 4 verses:

    'I'm dying to hold you close to me.
    It's my fondest, most ardent wish,
    to watch you sleep soundly in my arms,
    knowing I've won the most precious gift.

    Would you still walk down the isle with me?
    Would you one day be my scarlet bride?
    Show me there are good things on earth,
    and tell me I no longer need to hide.

    Will you press your cute, pink lips to my neck?
    Will I feel your silky hair against my face?
    Will I breathe your intoxicating scent all night,
    alone and embracing in our own private place?

    Will we watch the sun rise together?
    Will we kiss in the whispering rain one day?
    Will you show me how it feels to be,
    in those love stories people always say?'

    Excellent work!


  • forgedreality
    February 24

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    I loved this poem, the everything about it was in the right place at the right time. I really enjoy this, thanks for sharing.


  • silent28mystery
    February 24

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    a ballad of selfless love! it is very touchy indeed. i hope you two find in each other the purest and everlasting love. if she is humane this poem is sure to make her realize you true devotion to her. it was great to rea

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