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Magic Under the Bed

I was cleaning my room one stormy night,
when a sliver of light came up from the floor.
I fell to my knees to see it just right
and to my surprise; I found a trap door.
It was under my bed, hidden from sight,
no wonder I never saw it before.
I pushed on my bed, it moved to one side,
then pulled on the door and it opened wide.

I knew if I entered I must be deranged
but just like a cat, I needed to go.
Like the land of OZ, the colors had changed
and step by step, I went deeper below.
Then all time and space became rearranged,
I looked at my fingers, my ring was aglow.
Feeling the magic that came from my ring,
my body felt lighter; it was changing!

I flew all around with my new found wings,
I’d fly up above and downward I’d soar.
Feeling the power of magical things;
I loved this new land beyond the trap door.
A place filled with wizards, fairies and kings;
there was so much there that I could explore.
All of a sudden I fell on my head
It all was a dream, I fell out of bed.

 

 

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  • Ted E Bare gold member
    March 17, 2009
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    Congrats on the Bronze


  • Pisces Pieces
    March 15, 2009

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    I love the lead in..it's a story where the first lines immediately draw you in and make you curious...what's going on, what will happen next?!...then it builds up and up just like the new found wings...until we all wake up and realize it was just a dream! But the poem is very real and very cute and fun Imagery is perfect!
    Aspects of this remind me of a book I read not so long ago

    Thank You for entering!


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    March 7, 2009

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    That was a magical and wonderful dream! I had to chuckle for I could see me falling out of bed no matter if it was a good dream or not(lol). Thank you for your entry and good luck in the "Create Something Magical" contest.

    Ted E


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 4, 2009

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    What a magical place to visit in dreams!! Another wonderful write! Ouch about falling on your head though lol

  • LitNup
    February 27, 2009
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    Haha! What fun!


  • thepoetssoul
    February 26, 2009

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    Ouch I hate those kinds of dreamsThis is a wonderfully creative piece of poetry penned.The imagery is so vivid and full of colour.Thanks for the magical images, be blessed in all you do.

    Tony

  • Topnotchsy
    February 25, 2009

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    Nice write. The rhyming is great as is the story. To be perfectly honest I felt the ending was a bit of a cop-out, but that's probably because I as hoping the story would on. Why not bring one of the wizards or fairies back with you and have him/her tell a poem/story from their perspective

  • Papagallo
    February 25, 2009

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    Oh my what a dream. Did you perhaps eat or drink a wee-bit too much before retiring? a great poem, wish it was not a dream do you?


  • SomeonesToySoldier
    February 25, 2009

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    Great poem with a very humerous and relatable ending. The kind of read that draws you in irresistably and doe not disappoint. You did a great job with this Amera


  • cup-a-joe silver member
    February 25, 2009

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    Amera,

    I was wanting to come visit, and go look with ya.
    Gee a dream? what did you eat for supper?
    Joe


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 25, 2009
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    Aw, this was cute! I loved this Amera.

    With much love,

    mj.


  • Wandika gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    Yes

    but the memories of a dream like that can last a lifetime. Who then is to say what was or was not real. Nicely done.

    Jim

  • jadeangyal
    February 24, 2009

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    I like this form, and the subject you chose for it. You go along telling your story in the ABAB rhyme part, and then you put the turning point of the story right on the new rhyme. Very cool.

  • Purrsanthema
    February 24, 2009
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    Forgive me, I'm talking to the computer : it always thanks me for making a comment!

  • Purrsanthema
    February 24, 2009

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    Sending comments is not a chore! My principle editor is my cat Blaze: he rips up everything I do and whenever I ask him what he really thinks of the things I write he looks at me sagely and say "meow". He doesn't write much. His work isn't quite up to scratch: you know most editors!

  • Purrsanthema
    February 24, 2009
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    And all those people who aren't poets just think there are monsters under the bed!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    February 24, 2009

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    excellent

    This was just too cute
    I loved it sweet sis
    From the beginning to the end
    Isn't it a shame all the fun things end up being just a dream....well most of them anyway.....
    Best of luck in the contest
    Will try and catch up soon I have been in the hospital and still not back up to 100 % par
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • Rovingone gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    Ah that was so delightful. You have a great imagination and it's just like a child's. Reminds me of my poem, the imaginaries. This is like through the looking glass. Very nicely done.


  • HaleyMary
    February 24, 2009

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    This is wonderful, Amera. I like how you take the readers on an adventure and then at the end to discover it is all a dream. Just magical. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

    Haley Mary

  • Stormraven
    February 24, 2009
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    Mmmmm

    Loved this one


  • StarEyes
    February 24, 2009

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    Sis,

    Ok, just blow my mind.... I love this. and it gave me a few new ideas for the childrens book I am working on Hope you dont mind

    You are truly a magical writer my dear sister!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    I am staggered!!!
    You mean you have only just discovered the trap door?
    All poets have a trapdoor under their beds!
    Where else do the rhymes come from?

    As usual your triple rhymes in the Ottava are a delight, I think Marvin is going to appear in this contest so you can show him round the land beyond the trapdoor later




    Great pome too


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    Marvelous piece Amera
    But I am disapointed, I'd hoped that you like Alice would have continued this venture into Wonderland.


  • xxbunnyrabbitxx
    February 24, 2009
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    it was great

    it was awesome ate first i thought it was like a trippy poem, like you wrote it while you were high or something, but i have thoughts like this (not because im high, my imagination is very wild)
    its awesome to see that someone else shares my kind of thoughs
    kudos


  • Melodies
    February 24, 2009

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    You have made me very glad with this poem of enchantment because it's fun to imagine such a thing happening. If we get too seriously into this idea, though, our families will want to put us on psychiatric meds. lol Love your poem!


    • Amera gold member
      February 24, 2009
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      Aww... thanks What do you mean? Have you looked under your bed?

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