What would I ask if I could spend just one more precious day with you?
Were you frightened when told you had breast cancer,
as I swam and grew in your womb?
Did you feel torn when doctors asked you to abort me,
or was it an easy decision?
Did you lie awake filled with worry and strife;
worry about not being there for your small children already here?
Did you feel loved and taken care of in your illness,
or did you feel neglected and alone, as I have heard?
My heart aches to think you may have felt alone in your struggles;
hearing that those closest to you were not helpful,
or supportive, as they should have been.
Oh to have just one more day!
I would enshroud you with compassion, and lay healing hands
upon your exhausted and pain ridden body and mind;
take every precaution to nourish your tortured soul;
inject it with the inmost secret treasure of peace of mind.
I would hold you, knowing there will be no tomorrow,
selfishly absorbing the feel of your arms around me;
embedding the memories of how that special mother’s love feels;
for I have no memory.
I have no memory, and oh how I have yearned for that,
and oh how I have missed you!
Oh! What I would give for just one more day!
A contest entry
- Life/Death Revisited by ashjoe76.
1800 points, ended March 26, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a mothers love,
quite a gift
She gave you now you give back
touched my heart
precious write
so much love throughout your poem
God bless you my friend...
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A most wonderful poem and story . Very touching
and poignant ! It was a pleasure to read thank you ..
Best wishes , Friend Easy
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Such a sorrowful piece full of so much love in every word. What a wonderful mother she was to sacrifice herself to give life to you. A very heartfelt piece that has brought a tear to my eye. Every word used showed me the compassion and true love that was held by your wonderful mother. Such sadness to not be there for you, but knowing your life would continue. I agree with the person below....You deserved more than an honourable win. It's pure gold!
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*tears*
wow! your mother loved you so much! This is such a moving tribute to her and a testament to your love, compassion and courage. I have read this before, and it moves me to tears every time I read it. thank you for sharing it with our pwd group dear!
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This is beautiful! So touching! So poignant!
I love how you write of a difficult decision. I see the longing and the love in this poem. Personally, I think it deserved more than an Honorable Mention.
I really like this poem!
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beautiful and so touching to our hearts!
Masterpiece of soul and poem!
ears/Seattle
WE Salute your bold ink and loving heart!
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powerful write. life is too short and too precious to waste, seize the day. i hope you felt better after writing this. thank you for sharing and well-deserving congratulations for emerald cup.
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Losing someone is so hard and to lose, I am so sorry for your loss. We lost my husbands dad to stage four colon cancer a year and half ago and are still devastated. We miss him so much and would have given anything for just one more day with him. Thanks for sharing I know it was hard to write. hugs Theresa
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Patty
You know so often on here I read about love bewtween a man & a women. So much of it wishful thinking. But this is true love. Two tender hearts that have binded since before the birth of one. Just so very beautiful dear poet.
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Thanks so much for your beautiful and thoughtful comment. It is much appreciated. Thanks again. Blessings, Patty
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Tissues
Oh Patty, this write that you have penned here, has brought tears to my eyes.You have done a beautiful job weaving into your write many emotions for the reader to feel as they read you.
your words touched deep in my heart, I am really lost for words as to explain how your poem made me feel.
I just wanted to reach out and hug you.In my eyes, this write deserved the 'gold' but sadly that was not my choice to make, however in my heart it is 'gold'. Your words always find there way into my heart and tug hard at the strings.I wish you well with your writings and pray that your quill never runs dry.
Much love and happiness I send to you my beautiful friend with many blessings as well.
Your friend to the end,
~Anne~
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Thank you so much my dear friend. Your support is amazing and so uplifting. You have a beautiful soul and I am so happy we connected here. Blessings my friend, Patty
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paw-writer
Patty my beautiful friend,your support and friendship means the world to me.You have such a caring heart and the way that your love reaches out to everyone is beautiful.you have a way with making people feel loved and cared about, your soul shines brightly, and I am truely blessed to know you.
Blessings to you sweet soul.
~Anne~
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Very touching and emotional.
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This was a great write. Did this really happen? This was great. I look foward to reading more of your work.
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Thank you and yes it is a true story. Blessings, Patty
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This is such a sad write. It is a very touching write at that. You did a great job making this understandable. Great write.
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Hi Patty.This is by far one of your most touching works of poetry. Very emotional to read. Thanks Patty for sharing this with us.
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That is so beautiful and sad. I'm so sorry that you didn't know your mother.
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For just a day!!!
Oh, hon - this is so very heart-wrenching; and the love is so powerful. That connection is there; even though you never met face to face - that love you hold for one another is eternal. I am overwhelmed by this beautiful and compassionate write; and I so feel your need. I am sorry for your loss. She loved you so!
Karen
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Dear poet my heart cries for the loss of your mum to such a terrible diesease. You wrote a wonderful tribute. Thank you for entering my contest.
Love and Light AngelofLight -
this is an utterly wonderful dedication to the brave and special lady who handed her strength over to you, she would have been s proud of you, you have such inner strength, and so much talent
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Thanks so much for your kind and thoughtful comment. It means a lot to me always. Blessings, Patty
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Having lost my mother to breast cancer I can identify with your life. The difference is that when my mom was on her last particle of strength she asked if I would like a home made milkshake and a cheeseburger? I tried to stop her, but she would have none of it. It was her last act of kindness toward her son. Let me assure you that your mother would have done the same if she chose the things you shar in the heart ripping piece. She would have courted you while her pain was put behind her for the moment. Great heartfelt write Patty. RC
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Thanks so much Robin. Blessings, Patty
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A very emotional poem. So much saddness and regret. Also very sad that a situation like this could happen.Your writting was flawless and the flow was great.
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind comment. It is always appreciated. Blessings, Patty
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Very moving..
and beautifully penned even though there's great sadness there is also a story of an unconditional love and that also makes this piece very poignant, excellent and deeply emotional piece my friend..
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Awwww..Thanks so much for such a kind and thoughful comment. Good to hear from you again. Blessings, Patty
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Oh my, how this brought tears. Patty your words are so touching..a truly beautiful, and sad read. I wish you all the best always.
Linda
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Thanks so much Linda for your lovely comment. Blessings, Patty
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Aww Patty...this is so sad...but beautiful. I wish you did have one more day to spend with your Mother. She would be so proud of you. Well done!
Mariana
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Thanks so much for your kind comment. Blessings, Patty
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