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We Are All Warriors.

We are all warriors,
even the meekest of men
whose daughter, ravaged
by modern day barbarians
in their festival of lust,
will hunt down and castrate
each of those punk's junk
for destroying his precious child.

Frail grandmothers have been
known to delight in administering
concussions on the brainless noggins
of cowardly purse thieves.

Elmer the pimple faced nerd,
who finally had enough of the school bully,
found solace in a foot firmly planted
with all his might into the crotch
of the quickly humbled attacker.

Even the passengers on the flight
over Shanksville Pa. turned homicidal
against their bumbling aggressors,
ramming food carts down aisleways
and clawing with just fingernails
at the eyes of the terrorists
as they all went down in flames of glory.

Don't push the human psyche too hard,
it will slam back like a sledgehammer,
reducing you to pulp fiction,
just another case file for the

crime writers to expound on.

We are all warriors, it is instinctual,
it simmers under our skin,
and can be bruised into awareness,
until god help the tormentor.

Perhaps we need to teach

our children the basics
fundamentals of aggressive defense,
There would be a lot fewer
rapist and pedophiles,
if a child under attack,
would apply a clawed,
highly pressurized hand,
cupped viciously over
the offending scrotum
of such maggots and squeeze
harder then they ever did
on any joy stick of an X-box.
Soon enough the word would
get out to find alternative ways
for scumbags to quench their evil lust.

Perhaps the U.S. should
also send crop dusters
to fly over the strongholds
of any and all known terrorist camps
of Muslim persuasion and spray
gallons upon gallons of pork juice
over their most cowardly flesh,
thereby rendering them unworthy
of 72 virgins and heavenly bliss forevermore.
Being touched by what is unclean to them.
would create a lot less martyrs,
who would choose to enjoy what's
left of their lives here, rather then
immediately face the damnation
of thier next life.

We are all warriors,
but we have become far too tame,
when it comes to dealing with
the criminal warriors that walk
amongst us, and damage mankind.

If one murders another,
then the family members
should be given an hour
in a room with the perp,
once his DNA has proved him guilty.
they could be offered any
weapon of their choice
and complete immunity
that allows them to simply have at it!

Just some simple solutions,
that many today would
consider inhumane,
until their own loved fell
under the madness of
some psychotic mayhem/

Just a thought.




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  • WarrioroftheHeart
    February 24, 2009

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    ...And some will fight only when the need to act, to be involved and to respond to actions that they personally hold as unjust overcomes their predisposition towards what is considered "socially acceptable behavior".

    When they perhaps view that justice is not fair or correct in its summation, when mercy is dealt upon the merciless. When leniency is promoted towards those that are undeserving of pity or grace.

    You raised some good points here, although I did not directly refer to them, I can see how this comes about from what I wrote. If I were to have I would have written it something like the paragraphs above, with some questions attached at the end. I do not think that I need to include those questions here; from the thought that went into your poem I think that you probably already know them.

    I doubt that those placed in desperate situations consider themselves to be homicidal, just impelled to do something they they think as their only "right" option at the time.

    Just as people who already claim that they do not have to follow the laws set down by their claimed religion because they are fighting a holy war will probably find a way of continuing to carry out criminal acts regardless of their perceived holy cleanliness.

    The ends justifying the means and the difference between seeking personal or group gain over the protection of others.

    Yes, teaching defence techniques to our children would likely stop much bullying and random violence, but not if they are encouraged to be aggressive.

    As for the suggestion about murderers; I have always held that the families, and the victims themselves, should have a direct say in the punishment and sentencing of criminals.

    So many points of agreement from me and only a few, subtle points where I hold a differing viewpoint. Sorry for the long section on content, but you raised so many points of merit.

    I did enjoy reading this, thank you for entering it, there were points where I found it difficult to articulate the phases used, sometimes I found myself pausing at inopportune moments and at other I was getting confused by subtle twists in the tenses (past/present/future).

    I'm not sure I explained that well, I hate doing this but I feel I must to clarify so I'll use the words of your first stanza to explain:

    "We are all warriors,
    even the meekest of men,
    whose daughter is ravaged
    by modern day barbarians
    in some street gang's lust fest,
    would hunt down and castrate
    the punk's junk that destroyed
    his precious child."

    I might have written:

    We are all warriors,
    even the meekest of men
    whose daughter, ravaged
    by modern day barbarians
    in their festival of lust,
    will hunt down and castrate
    each of those punk's junk
    for destroying his precious child.

    But that is me and you are you, the changes are only small and I don't think they change the meaning. To me, it makes it more recitable.

    Sorry for this being so long, I am seriously trying to be brief.

    This read much like a rant, which I am sure it was, it was very prosey and the rhythm was uneven, I do think you did a good job at this write. I feel that it is better, as set out, written rather than spoken. I do think that, with a little work, you could make this into something that any great orator would be proud to shout out to the crowd.

    Good luck in the contest, hopefully you get some competitors well done and all the best.

    Adrian


  • guardianhost gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    All the best in the contest

    This is all way to deep for me. I am over whelmed with sorrow for all those who have fallen victim...Bravo for those like yourself to avenge the vile madness in this world.


  • ShiningNShadows
    February 24, 2009

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    As always, this is incredible!!! I just love your writings! They all make me ponder or laugh or smile. This is amazing. Great metaphors and wonderful message. Very, very well done!!!


  • Melodies
    February 24, 2009

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    Have you been reading my mind?

    Oddly so, every trip out of my domain lends itself to imagining what I will do to anybody who attempts to raid my space. I am not given to road rage, but try to hurt me with personal contact and I will inflict every known (by me) injury that I ever observed when my kids took karate. I admire your enthusiasm for payback and proactive protection.