I dream of darkness. Nothing. Oblivion.
The night strips me of my body.
Imagining a space with nothing left to feel.
Sat inside a transparent bubble.
But the dream dies.
Clutching to the bliss of inevitability.
And I know it's no use.
I do the same thing every day.
The world lays siege
Its' cavalry harass my footmen.
It's Humpty Dumpty. See it!
Falls...
With a crack reality invades.
I begin to hear the daggers it wields.
Barbarians. Slash across my ribs.
Once. Twice. Open me up.
I see them stood above me.
Everywhere.
Taking hold of my limbs.
Tear me down.
I struggle from their grip.
And they release me!
Perhaps they have removed
Their tricks and their traps.
But I know better.
Laughing at me. Behind my back.
Their weapons have already worked.
Haul myself free! The remaining dream
Shards fill my body.
Move a limb. Driving them in.
As I hobble my way to the door.
The world falls on it's side
Or was it me? No... Reality clouding.
Condensing. Freezing.
As my head explodes in ice.
Variety for the day, I lay. Twitching.
Breathe I tell meself.
The air fills my lungs for a moment!
The same moment in which he says “No”
Gases released once again of this girdle.
But do they pity me?
Just observing this cadaver.
This pale, morose, carcass.
This undead mumbling.
These stubs reach blindly.
Seeking everlasting
Relief for just a moment
Never comes. Never fear!
Spewing villainous obscenities
May their false love endure!
Should they not deliver
Respite for a moment.
The weeds have been outgrown.
Flower 'pon this mossy stone.
Their roots impale.
To turn it into shale.
The old clarity lifts.
A veil, smog, rescinding.
Hold me close.
And don't let me loose.
Onto that false,
False paradise lost.
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Naznomarn
[Re-Edit of poem 1807416 by Naznomarn]
A contest entry
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gives me a feeling of wanting to go find someone to hug...
Dunno why and it's not very wise to ask because before you know it you'll start understanding that I rant in my comments and sometimes they just don't make sense but no worries I try and tell myself that they do and then I write on your message place that I hope that this makes sense...does it? Hope so. see lol! Well to be honest I feel like this alot but then again I do live inside my head alot and from one thing to the next my little happy not so happy brain bounces subject to subject. I can't be serious so I don't even try lol. I really do like the last two lines though...they have such a weird but knowing feeling...what exactly gave me such a feeling to go find a hug buddy lol!
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Hehe! ^_^ Thanks!
And I love the long comments! ^_^ I'm very bad at long ones
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"With a crack of reality invades", that's a beautiful line there.
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Quite a powerful poem. Very dark and vivid in imagery. My interpretation of this leans toward the feelings of 'hanging out', either for dope or alcohol. It doesn't matter if the subject matter is different, I was able to find my own angle - and it worked!
Best wishes in the contest
Sincerely -Emmjay
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you have at least one spelling error in this. maybe try running your stuff through word before posting it so that it catches the errors. thank you for entering. viyanna rosemarie
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p.s. I've used British spellings, so please forgive some discrepancies!
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Thanks.
Forgot that the lab computers don't have spell checking in firefox. All is sorted now (There's one that looks like a mistake, but it's ok, it's not!)
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nice job.
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