If tomorrow starts without me
And I'm not here to see
If the sun should rise
And find your eyes
All filled with tears for me
I'd wish you wouldn't cry
The way you did today
While thinking of the many things
We didn't get to say
And as you face
My place of rest
I pray you grace
And peace from me
And remember this is how
God wanted it to be
Because an angel came
Calling my name
And took me by the hand
She showed me the beauty
In the crystal clear streams
And the brightness
In this land
She said I had my place
But I would leave the world behind
And in that moment I saw your face
Agreed and looked one last time
At the beautiful life I called mine
I saw every moment and my heart was shattered
By how much the little things always mattered
So if tomorrow starts without me
And I didn't get to say
Just how wonderful life is
Come what may
Remember that I love you
Forever and today
But I'll be waiting for the angels
To call your precious name
Author notes
A good friend of mine just died. He was only 21 years old... this is for him and my great grandmother
Problems areas? Can I make it better?
Comments
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I like the first line a LOT.
I don't have much to say about this. I really, really like it. It's an unusual structure, which I like a lot, in most places.
There are lots of lines in there that I like more than a lot of lines I read. Very nice.
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I like this poem. It is full of feelings of love. You need to be mindful of your spelling and word use. Line 1: with out should be without. Line 2: "Because an angel came" not and angel. Such errors jump out fast. Also try and not use all those contractions in your work. Contractions weaken this poem. You did a good work here. You may like to make several verses out of it. written as you have it make sit a fast read and I think you would like your reader to read the words slower. It is a nice piece though.
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if this isn't what i needed to read today then there is nothing in the world that will help me feel better. thank you for sharing this with me and for being you. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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OH WOW! Thispoem is excellent in so many ways!
It is exactly what I would want to say to loved ones I leave behind. It is so excellently described and expressed and would definately be comforting. The rhymes are good and the poem flows really well with a consistent ryhthm.
What beautiful sentiment throughout - you truly have a talent - a way with words!
Well done and so sorry for your current grief.
Thank yo for sharing
SarahD
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