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©copyright 2009 Frans Bezuidenhout


 

It was much warmer in their shack than outside, where night had fallen with dark foreboding over their modest makeshift house. Like many township houses, theirs was small, wedged into a small space— but it was ours, he reflected. He had watched his father build it, bringing home what he could find to shape it like a puzzle into a home. 

Watching smoke curl slowly upwards to disappear within layers of soot, he listened, as many nights before, to his mother’s hushed lamentation. Would she also be leaving them, he anxiously wondered as he swiped at a tear. His thoughts shifted as he placed his chin on his knees, drawing his legs closer to seek comfort from dying embers.

He longed to have fun in fields, where each day gave treasured dreams.  Often his body was caked with dried mud from frolicking naked at water's edge, where ripples shot silver arrows across its surface.  Human anguish within the township, he deliberated, cannot be compared to cries of satisfaction when finding a perfect stone among the herd, which would travel with speed to kill its target.  Smelling salt mixed with sweat when they quenched thirst and stilled hunger stealing milk from the herd— he envied them.

His father taught him to hunt, also to leopard-crawl before aiming his bow. Recalling when his mother prepared a partridge dish after his first hunt, his face twisted a quick smile, then with a heavy sigh he shifted closer to the fireplace.

Recalling excitement when his father announced five years ago they would relocate to the city, he remembered his fear.  Hearing urgency in their voices, where he sat at his father’s side listening to their conversation while they drank beer, their thoughts seemed to hover in the dusk above the crackling fire when silence fell— suspecting there was more to it than moving to the city.

There were no tears when they climbed into the bus, but he noticed his mother seek comfort in nursing his sister. Township life was different— none seemed friendly, taking them hours to locate the home of his uncle. Although tired, sleep alluded him, as he could not make sense of never-ceasing cries drifting into his room. There was a foreboding in the air. 

When they arrested his father that evening, he heard them mention the words “Subversive political activity”, then he knew, like the others who sometimes met at their house, his father would also not come home soon. 


Frail in failing health, Robin Island had sapped life— his father had come home to die. They buried him three weeks later.

Winds ripped under lightening, jolting his mind back to the present.  Shivering he stood up to share his food with his sister, realising he soon would leave his childhood dreams. 


~~ The End


 

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  • myrataal silver member
    March 2

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    Wonderful story, Frans!

    You voiced the voiceless; those often not capable of telling their stories. I found credibility in your account of the evasive dream; of the location and the story line. We in South Africa are privileged to share the blue skies; the opportunities and the ability to recapture lost dreams.

    Thank you for your take on our political situation: ever the healer and endopathic soul.

    Love
    Myra


    • FransB gold member
      March 2
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      Ah, you discovered my story!

      Thanks to BonQ, a wonderful mentor, I am learning something I did not realise that I can do -- humbly said. Lovies to you. Frans


  • BonnieQ silver member
    February 27

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    Excellent!

    This short short is superbly written, dear friend! You have a way of capturing the reader right away and hold their attention right to the last word; best of all, you leave them wanting more and more! Soon, I can see you putting together a collection of short stories equal to say, a novella, and getting it published.

    You really do have an amazing talent. Just remember that the readers don't always know what you know; in fact, just pretend they don't and you'll be less likely to leave any unanswered questions. You see, Robin Island meant nothing to me because I live in the USA. Interestingly, though, there might be a lot of people in your country that could be unfamiliar with Robin Island. When I write fiction set in the USA, I make no assumptions about readers' knowledge of any particular locale.

    By the way, I am much improved and was out running errands today, then 3 of us took our neighbor out for dinner; she is moving away this weekend. So, I hope to get to "The Arm" and "The Boat" sometime tomorrow; after I get my TSaS broadcast prepared and out.

    Much luv & hugs, BonnieQ

    • FransB gold member
      February 27
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      BonnieQ

      Your support and guidance is much appreciated. I always learn something new. Glad to hear that you are feeling better. Have not been well myself for the past three weeks. Love to hear your assessment on 'The arm' now called 'The blanket' and 'The Boat'. Frans

  • BonnieQ silver member
    February 26
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    Question

    "When they arrested his father," -- why was he arrested, you give us no hint. How about: "When the police hauled off his father to Debtors' Prison,"
    Luv ya! Was ill yesterday, so did not even turn on my computer.

    • FransB gold member
      February 26
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      Ah, I took it

      the reader would be able to link 'Robin Island' with 'political subversity' - as you see, I have now included this.

      My thoughts were with you yesterday realising that you might be ill. I hope that you feel better. Thank you for taking time to check back.

      Blessings. Frans


  • Sandygram
    February 24

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    Wonderful Short Story

    Sometimes as a child, for reasons not of our making, we must grow up suddenly and leave childhood behind. We realize then how the little things we remember and miss mean the most to us. We hold them close in our hearts and draw upon them when needed.
    You do stories so well. Thank you for sharing. Take care my friend.

    Peace and Grace, Sandy


    • FransB gold member
      February 24
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      Thank you Sandy.

      BonQ has been helping me, she is a wonderful mentor. Hugs to you. Frans

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