The quest
of everlasting doubt
towards the truth of life
is endless
and yet
man tries to find
the secrets cleverly hidden
in the shadows of the earth
through faith
and love
and ever growing knowledge
he tries to grasp
the heart of life
but doomed
to fail
man's struggle for perfection
can only shows the cracks
in the ever shallow face
of human kind
Please tell me what you think
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"but doomed
to fail
man's struggle for perfection
can only shows the cracks
in the ever shallow face
of human kind"
that is my favorite part of the poem. This piece of poetry is stunning and captivating, truly remarkable. There is so much feeling and emotion pored into each line and every single word; makes you think, I love when poetry makes you think that’s the best part about poetry the thought and feeling lingering in your head after words see now you know you did something right I’m ranting aren’t I? I just wanted you to know that I really enjoyed this write keep up writing well penned literature bravo! You should be proud. -
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thank you so very much
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"can only shows the cracks" This should be "can only SHOW the cracks"
But other then that little mistake this was a very well written poem. I enjoyed reading it and thank you for sharing it. -
I can't see it
Poem might very well be good, but since I have to strain my eyes to read it I will never know . . . -
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i really like this poem it speacks of things that human kind can never reach but always hope to , i think you did a really good job in writeing this poem it gives the reader alot to think about
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I don't see what's so complicated about the title. I get it, but this was a great write.
"but doomed
to fail
man's struggle for perfection
can only shows the cracks
in the ever shallow face
of human kind"
This was my favorite stanza.
Wonderfully done (:
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thanx!
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Woot woot
Umm. I like this. It tells a lot. I get the title, Black whole. I'm glad that you did do it that way. Making the reader think outside the box. I really like the ending. It is harsh yet true. Really great write. Keep writing. -
I don't quite understand the title - black whole as in his whole being? Or meant to be black hole, as in a hole dug in the ground. Please explain if you get the time. Thank you for a great write though.
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both, I guess :-)
Man tries to be perfect, but in reality, man is a 'black whole', a broken being. There's only darkness, blackness.
Life can be like a black hole, using up all energy and pulling us towards nothing. There's nothing, we see nothing.
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